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Fell Through The Ice -- Charlie Drabbles

Apr 12, 2011 11:01

Title: Fell Through The Ice (Incomplete Charlie Drabbles)
Author: audreyii_fic
Fandom: Twilight (Team Jacob)
Rating: M
Characters: Swan Family, Black Family, Clearwater Family
Genre: Humor/Angst
Warnings: Language. Heartfail.

Summary:
Thoughts on Charlie's life.

Notes:
The Twilight Illustrated Guide comes out today (coinciding with the sinking of the ( Read more... )

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May 2000, Part 2 audreyii_fic April 12 2011, 16:13:57 UTC

As the sun sets on the day of the funeral, after the last guests have gotten into their cars and pulled away, you realize you haven't seen Jacob in several hours. You check in Billy's room, where he is lying on his bed, still in his suit, Harry next to him holding his hand. Is Jake in here? you mouth, and Harry shakes his head silently in response. In the hallway you can hear the noisy sobbing of the twins through their thin door ( ... )

Re: May 2000, Part 2 lsjcandy April 12 2011, 17:46:36 UTC

OH I REMEMBER THIS ALL TOO WELL, you gave us a teaser. Looooong ago.

I have this feeling I'm gonna need fluff after this.

Re: May 2000, Part 2 audreyii_fic April 12 2011, 18:03:51 UTC

I did, yeah :-\ Back then I thought I'd finish.

There's always the garage!smut fluff from day before yesterday ;)

Re: May 2000, Part 2 lsjcandy April 12 2011, 18:16:13 UTC

*wiggles eyebrows* Yeah...

And Anna has posted some stuff...

Re: May 2000, Part 2 lulu_honey April 12 2011, 22:46:16 UTC

This, this right here, is why I can't stand Meyer. I don't even know, maybe she thought all the vampires were just so damn special that they all needed to soliloquize for a million pages so that they could have backstory. The other characters, the ones she obviously didn't feel were as important, were left little snippets here and there. I think this had the opposite effect of what she was aiming for; her precious vampixies come off as cookie-cutter, stunted and cliched. Piecing things together is a way more organic way to build a story and it leaves Jacob and the rest of those secondary characters feeling more life-like and well formed. What you've done here is basically line up things that we've learned from canon (Sarah's car crash and Jake's near obsession for fixing things) and presented them in a more organic way. You also have a knack for trusting your readers to have half a brain and figure things out for themselves. When ever Meyer tried to do that I always over-thought it when what she had concocted was predictable and ( ... )

Re: May 2000, Part 2 audreyii_fic April 13 2011, 19:58:25 UTC

No, I totally understand. There's such a thing as overdeveloping -- telling instead of showing, etc -- and Meyer's a particularly egregious offender. For those reasons we should probably be happy that she didn't feel the wolves were interesting enough to develop; if she had, they would have sucked.

Organic was never Meyer's strength. She's more like partially hydrogenated corn syrup.

Re: May 2000, Part 2 ronjacobfan April 13 2011, 03:02:32 UTC

And I'm crying even harder.

How can you do this to my Jacob&Charlie-loving heart? A ten year old sweetheart feeling like he was the one who caused his mother to die is found by a man who has lost his only family.

That night you try to call Renee and Bella, but no one picks up.

My heart hurts.

Re: May 2000, Part 2 audreyii_fic April 13 2011, 20:21:52 UTC

It hurt me to write, if that helps. It's how Jacob makes sense to me, though.

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Re: May 2000, Part 2 audreyii_fic April 13 2011, 20:31:58 UTC

*pat*

Re: May 2000, Part 2 daintress May 24 2011, 01:51:10 UTC

Oh gosh. That's heart-wrenching. It would explain why he's so obsessive with projects, too. *sigh*

Re: May 2000, Part 2 audreyii_fic May 26 2011, 03:16:24 UTC

There aren't enough snorgles in the world.

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