How Jack became Pupule

[aunicorntale]

I rushed through this and edited it once (and then only enough for rough cohesion) before turning this in because it was late.
So it's SERIOUSLY rough and needs a good hard polish before adding to the manuscript.

Comments

[fromherashes]

I really like this, how it's kind of child-like and you can tell the narrator is a child, but not really what age, and the differences in the kids' personalities and everything. The only negatives I would say is that it seems like it ends really abruptly.

[melncholiablue]

It did end abruptly. I got to the 7th page and my teacher wanted a max of 5...
but for the manuscript, It can be longer, so I'll work on stretching that end out.
:)