More like forevers!! So glad you didn't kill off his grandfather, and for making him Kup XD Love the intensity and heat of the interfacing, so lovely. Though now they need babies!!
Kup was awesome! There should be a certain trio (Reflector) who put the moves on the older Guardian Dragon. lol. Can you imagine the look on Rodimus' and Springer's expressions: Rodimus blushing mad from hearing them going at it and Springer going "damn, I hope my stamina is that good when I'm his age". lol Plus, Reflector being three, imagine all the sparklings for Kup. :P <3
Awwwrr... Grumpy little guardian dragon has been tamed. Or not. But that's okay, Springer likes them a little wild. >:D
And Kup... *snort* silly old dragon. I get the feeling he's looking forward to having great-grandkids just so he can retire from the whole guardian business and spend his days telling stories of his own youth to the anklebiters.
Though, one point about your writing, if I may: I'd say you're abusing the exclamation point here. In fiction, it's generally only used for the lines spoken by the characters, to give the reader some idea of the WAY the characters say them.
It's okay to use it every now and then to underline some surprising or important point of a lengthy description, but for example after the part where Kup appeared, you seemed to use it on every other sentence. It simply gets tiresome after a while. Don't underestimate the reader, we can understand when things happen quickly or unexpectedly without extra emphasis on every other phrase.
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Plus, Reflector being three, imagine all the sparklings for Kup. :P <3
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And Kup... *snort* silly old dragon. I get the feeling he's looking forward to having great-grandkids just so he can retire from the whole guardian business and spend his days telling stories of his own youth to the anklebiters.
Though, one point about your writing, if I may:
I'd say you're abusing the exclamation point here. In fiction, it's generally only used for the lines spoken by the characters, to give the reader some idea of the WAY the characters say them.
It's okay to use it every now and then to underline some surprising or important point of a lengthy description, but for example after the part where Kup appeared, you seemed to use it on every other sentence. It simply gets tiresome after a while. Don't underestimate the reader, we can understand when things happen quickly or unexpectedly without extra emphasis on every other phrase.
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