Oh wow. I loved how you used the video here. This is such a smart story, one that makes you think and wonder. I was feeling so claustrophobic for them and actually felt something for that woman. Which I never have before.
Thank you! It's such a goofy video, but the Greek chorus idea seemed to fit it perfectly. And they were trapped, and it affected them all in different ways, with different residual effects.
And that woman was such a bad actress, it's hard to feel anything for her. The look on her face when she goes to the mailbox and finds it empty? So very badly done.
But that didn't stop the idea of mothers and sons getting into my head for this, too.
Anyway, thank you. It's the kind of story that doesn't get much of a response, but I had a lot of thinky fun writing it.
This is wonderful. So clever, all sorts of shades and fuzzied realities. Masks and mothers and all kinds of feelings that come out from both those things. I like the idea of Lance wondering if he should have taken more care to keep in touch with his mother. It's always been an odd duck of a video, for me - why not focus on *them*, after all - but you've fashioned it into a lovely story.
Like I told rikes, I didn't see these last few comments until the other day. Thank you for commenting, and I'm glad you liked it. It's a totally bizarre video, really. I mean, why?
I was feeling Lance's pain when I wrote it - I had just read his book - and I think that's reflected in the tone of the story.
Oh, wow, Donna! This is so different for you, but you've made it work so well, with the restlessness and the wanting and how the video reached into their lives. Wonderful job, doubly so when I think of the source!
And thank you, I was really happy with how it turned out. I had just read Lance's book and some of his promo comments about how badly they communicated sometimes, and I think that's what this story is about.
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This was just beautifully written.
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And that woman was such a bad actress, it's hard to feel anything for her. The look on her face when she goes to the mailbox and finds it empty? So very badly done.
But that didn't stop the idea of mothers and sons getting into my head for this, too.
Anyway, thank you. It's the kind of story that doesn't get much of a response, but I had a lot of thinky fun writing it.
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It was a heck of a lot of fun to write this.
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I was feeling Lance's pain when I wrote it - I had just read his book - and I think that's reflected in the tone of the story.
Again, thank you!
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And thank you, I was really happy with how it turned out. I had just read Lance's book and some of his promo comments about how badly they communicated sometimes, and I think that's what this story is about.
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