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fic (the closer): undone

Aug 13, 2012 11:27

Title: Undone
Author: averita
Summary: Later, Sharon will think that she really should have seen this coming. (Sharon/Brenda-ish.)
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: ~2340
Spoilers: Minor ones through Last Rites; should be completely obliterated by canon after the finale tonight.
A/N: Thanks to meryl_edan for the fantastic beta!
Disclaimer: Nothing is mine.

( This was never going to end well. )

tv: the closer, writing: fanfiction

Comments 9

somniesperus August 13 2012, 18:05:46 UTC

Ouch.

You wish I wasn’t all you have left?

Double ouch. Poor Sharon. She comes off very well in this: used, hurt, but still capable of generosity, even if it's also a kind of self-preservation. So, pretty much like in canon. And this is the worst side of Brenda--a thoughtless user--which is canon too, even if she can be (and often is) more than that. I'm glad she didn't ruin everything. Thanks for sharing this.

averita August 13 2012, 21:50:15 UTC

Thanks! I struggled with this one - I had a very clear image of what I wanted to get across, but had trouble actually making it work. I'm glad to hear it did for you ( ... )

firstlady1408 August 13 2012, 21:38:34 UTC

I have been waiting to read this in full all day, You know I haven't really read much Brenda/Sharon but this was a great introduction to it. You captured the neediness, selfish behaviour of BL. I did kinda feel sorry for her, when the world is caving in around us we reach out to any warm body/person and this is what she was doing. And heartbreaking as it was for Sharon she came across as something Brenda does need more than a one night stand she would regret, a true friend. Great fic sweets x

averita August 13 2012, 21:52:24 UTC

Thanks, hon ♥ I'm glad you liked it. I think it could go either way at the end - they could move past this and develop a true friendship, like you said, or things could get awkward and even angstier. Or maybe both! Just wish we could actually see something like that on the show :P

Happy birthday in an hour!

major_roon August 14 2012, 22:31:29 UTC

Well, that was very good. I love the 'not so happy endings'. Life isn't always fair and often things don't end up the way we would like them to.

Your Sharon is wonderful; she has a heart of gold.

I hope you will write more for this fandom, you really 'get' these two. Thank you for sharing :)

tayryn August 15 2012, 01:24:12 UTC

Can I just say ditto to what everyone else has said?!? No? Damm!

I very much enjoyed this, hon. It felt real to me.

And the last line ripped my heart out... wow!!

I hope we get more of these two from you!!

outuendo_11 August 19 2012, 06:40:35 UTC

This story is so well written and I think truly perfect to their characters. As much as we'd love for them to end up together, for Brenda to wake up and care for Sharon, I can just totally see her being oblivious. This was really perfect and heartbreaking and just as long as it should be! I really hope you plan on writing more stories! I love your Brenda and Sharon!!!