The Perils of Innocence Chapter 21

[avidbeader]

Start from the beginning here.

DISCLAIMER: If you recognize the character, it isn't mine. Just playing in J.K. Rowling's sandbox.

Comments

[katiedid717]

That seems like a fantastic end point - definitely leaves me yearning for the next chapter!

I didn't notice any errors, but I'm not good at Brit-picking, so I'll leave that to the others.

This is a really intriguing story - I've read a good amount of AU, but you go about it in a very different way from other authors. Can't wait to see what you come up with next!

[avidbeader]

Thanks so much for the feedback - the more eyes the better!

I'm just relieved to finally get this chapter out - it fought me tooth and nail. I'm hoping I can get my muse back for a bit and get on to Hogwarts!

[nuclearpolymer]

I'm really enjoying this. It's particularly interesting seeing the Muggle/Wizard cultural assumptions run up against each other, and I also like seeing more family and adult interactions. Though of course the main delight is seeing the kids team up and figure out their own way into the world.

[avidbeader]

Thanks so much for the feedback! While the foray into Hogwarts will be mainly focused on the kids, I do have plans for more things to happen with the adults as well.

[marie_j_granger]

I would never complain about the chapter being longer, but it is a good cliffhanger. I enjoyed the new stuff a lot.

My only suggestion would be to use snobbery instead of attitude in the line after the strawberry leaves thing.

[avidbeader]

Thanks! I'll take a look at that sentence again. I think I was echoing something I'd read somewhere, someone's delivery of the word "attitude", that seemed to fit at the time.