Update

Feb 29, 2008 13:32


So, obviously I fell off the 'update every sunday' wagon. It wasn't doing much for me anyways. I have, however, done some work. Still nothing on Ashura really, but I did post chapters 4 and 5 of Shadow Wars. Nifty huh? Linkage:

Chapter Four

Chapter Five

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odlar March 4 2008, 19:42:32 UTC
Chapter 5, 5th to last paragraph: "I didn’t have any questions so I thanked him for his help and said I’d stay here until my guide had arrived..."

Maybe it's just me, but I'd phrase that a bit differently seeing as how you've made such a big deal up to this point about Alex having an insurmountable amount of questions; perhaps say that the man hurried off before Alex could pick any specific question out of the many he had thought of.

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aximilij March 4 2008, 19:56:50 UTC
it's a little wordy, but it really should be modified slightly in context, such as "I had no questions regarding my living assignment" or perhaps I should put "Of course I had a million questions, but none of them were anything I felt would be very well received so...."

I'll think about it, I'm only going through some minor light revisions as I write these, mostly just a read through or two. Someday I'm sure I'll go back and sharpen some things up and maybe dull some of the foreshadowing, we'll just have to see how things turn out.

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aximilij May 7 2008, 22:19:30 UTC
I come and I go, been busy with school and what not, and I'm sure I don't have many readers anyways, actually you're the first one to ever remark on a lack of posting.

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aximilij May 7 2008, 22:26:15 UTC
I used to do a lot of commenting, but people stopped posting, and after awhile it wasn't worth the effort. I read my friends page a couple times a day, but that's about it these days.

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