Another 28

[ayanna_wildfire]

I had this one pretty much finished, but the ending wasn't working out too well... I'm not sure about this ending, but it works

Comments

[nate_z]

First, one slight critique:

"they did that martial arts thing, Tai Chi."

That seems awkward and out of place. It might work in dialogue, but it doesn't really fit with the mood. Maybe "the martial art known as Tai Chi" or something similar instead.

Other than that, "niiiiiice." ;)
You set the mood very well, and I felt I really was watching a sacred ceramony.