"Creative Nonfiction"

[azderak]

This is a creative nonfiction piece I wrote, it only takes about 2 minutes to read. It is my first attempt at creative nonfiction, and I have to turn it in monday, so any comments about if it is bad, mediocre, or good would be appreciated, tell me what you like, what you hate, what I can fix

Comments

[exvanlane]

I like it, brought back memories that I think everyone has from their childhood :). There were a few parts where you were explaining past experiences and you would switch from past tense to present tense in a way that really didn't make much sense to me.

In the paragraph where you start to talk about your experience with the bloody mary bathroom thing you write in past tense, "..I would open my mouth..." Then later in the paragraph you write in present tense "Rushing to the light switch I turn it on..."

So yeah, just a couple confusing parts like that. Unless I read in wrong or something.... but yeah, it's good, I like it.

[something2live4]

LOl, I love my g/f anyway, dont wory dear, its a different kind of love I have for you, I mean you are my cute red head lol. Anyway, so yeah, I thought this was amazing, I enjoyed it TONS.. yuo should write more, no really, do... No seriously, do it! Just wanted to let you know I love ya!

~Resident femmy goth lord of eastern europe!

[esperanza_]

I really liked this.........

[yeah_its_me]

You know, you have some good points there. I really enjoyed reading it. Ü

I agree with the first person, you could either keep everything that's present in the present tense, and everything that already happened in the past tense, or beter yet, keep everything strictly in present tense, and then the reader would get more of a sense on how as you're staring into the mirror, your mind keeps wandering to your childhood.