He he he, *laughs with glee* Wow that was one of the most graphically violent metaphores I have read in a long time. Lets see I really like the first one as is... elspecially the lines like "if you will please" "when will you" I dunno, the polite comments and questions, I think it added some depth, and sense of unease. Rather than most teenage angst with is saying that everything is forced on us... I dunno. The last one, really angsty, but I love the last 6 lines! Oh man those were great, especially the reason istead of books. By the way, you doing all right hun?? Your not listening to much of that younge angry men music are you?? LOL, anyway, keep it up, I hope you have a really sheltered ignorent, happy feel good, maybe a little feminist, teacher to shock with these....
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