Scenario One
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Title: Scenario One
Pairing: 2min
Word Count: 494
Rating: NC-17
Warning(s): PWP mostly lol, and a very horny couple :] haha
A/N: This is actually my first fanfiction. Please take it easy on me and comment! :]
Minho pinned Taemin against the wall in SHINee’s living room. Minho’s lips were pressed roughly against Taemin’s innocent ones as one of Minho’ ( Read more... )
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This was good hun.keep it up.
Oh and can I make an suggestion?For your next one,try not to use there names over and over.You kept saying" Minho did this,Taemin did that.Try next time to use nicknames or certain characterstics to replace there names.instead of saiding Minho repeately,you could say the rapper.For Taemin you could say the maknae,the blonde,the youngest,Tae.so many terms,nicknames or discrptions could replace simply repeating there name.(some reason it was easier for me to think of for Taemin haha)You also should try to avoid saying then too much.Find new ways to lead into the next action.
I hope you don't take this as bashing you.i really did like this.I just wanted to give helpful criticsm.Because the truth is,people telling you something is really good,don't help you get better.Its the flaws they point out that helps you fix it for the next..Once more.Good Job.^_^Your very descriptive.You can easily picture it.I love the ending.
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