Alright, different story this time: A Nameless Bloom, chapter 1

[willwr1te4food]

Alright, I'm taking a break from that other story "Crimson Regret" as my main story is undergoing its third rewrite and its currently the top priority. This one I have written a long time ago, but never finished (the first version reaching up to 20 chapters but I was unhappy with it and I didn't even know how to end it and now its going through

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[mitsukyoko]

Magnificent! You have such a way with words! Your use of vocabulary and imagery is excellent! You can almost reach out and touch your characters, as if they were standing in front of you. So detailed, so, so...OK, I ran out of words to use. But keep 'em comin'!

[willwr1te4food]

Lol thanks, but I have to re write it because the billowing cloak thing reminds me of Star Wars all of a sudden ^^;;

[mitsukyoko]

And what's wrong with Star Wars? Lol!

[willwr1te4food]

Nothing's wrong with Star Wars, but the whole cloak thing doesn't go with ninjas in 16th century Japan XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD