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May 26, 2009 07:16

Oh gracious, I turn a blind eye for just a sexond and the second post fills up! Darlings, sweetpeas, do please forgive my tardiness. I bring you now our third installment of the fantasticousity, and would indeed love to, ah, beg your pardon in being so late about it.

SHIN MEGAMI TENSEI: PERSONA 4 KINK MEME
PART THREE

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anonymous August 18 2009, 06:34:53 UTC

I've had this idea floating around in my mind for some time now an I would love to see a lovely Anon fill this ( ... )

writer!anon anonymous August 25 2009, 02:29:38 UTC

Thanks, guys, I appreciate the comments. Glad you're enjoying it so far. I'll make updates as often as I can :)

Fool's Paradise [3a/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 02:05:14 UTC

Embarrassingly, I just realized I missed the apostrophe in the title. Grammar fail D: Thank you to the four anons who responded to the first two chapters, encouragement is a big help!

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Hanging out with her senpai rather than her classmates is probably a little weird, but they never let it show. They treat Rise the same as they do each other, and in return she shows the side she thinks they'd like: cheerful, bubbly Risette who flirts like a master and never misses a word of gossip. It's not a lie, just another facet. Rise knows she ought to pull all these pieces together and quit pretending to be things she isn't - or at least something that isn't the full her - but it's hard to know how. Naoto wouldn't have that problem. Based on what Rise's seen, he definitely doesn't care about pleasing other people all the time ( ... )

Fool's Paradise [3b/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 02:11:15 UTC

It's another four days later before she sees Naoto again - though he doesn't see her.

She hears enough about him in the meantime just from working at the store, and none of it's complimentary. The media might be all over the murder case, but people in Inaba hate to even hear it mentioned - things like that don't happen in nice, rural towns - making a detective who won't stop asking questions about it pretty unpopular. Rise doesn't even know Naoto, not really, but she still tenses up every time she hears interfering brat or weirdo kid.

Naoto's still a jerk, sure - but he's not weird. She's sure of that. He's just really into his job, and Rise tries to convince herself that's why she sees him from her bedroom window one early summer evening, walking side-by-side with Kanji Tatsumi ( ... )

Fool's Paradise [3c/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 02:19:02 UTC

Rise spends another twenty minutes practically hanging out over the window ledge before she gives up - and it's not till much later that evening that she finally sees Kanji walking back along the street, while she's sweeping the front steps of the store. Naoto isn't with him. And sure, she's happier about that than she'd like to admit, but she still needs to talk to Kanji-kun and she can't chase after him with a broom in her hand - nor is she comfortable with calling out his name, particularly when he looks so miserable ( ... )

Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 02:27:37 UTC

Two days after that, Rise's standing in the doorway of Marukyu Tofu, marveling at Naoto Shirogane's amazing ability to show up when she's wearing a shop apron and hat. It's not her most flattering look.

Naoto nods, tipping down his cap. "Good afternoon, Kujikawa-san. Kanji Tatsumi said you wished to speak with me."

"You were hanging out with him again?" Rise asks - snaps, really - before she can catch herself. Don't introduce yourself first, Rise, that'd be too normal."No. Do you have information regarding the case ( ... )

Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 13:08:27 UTC

Coming from Marukyu Revue, I never notice the title grammar! XD

Nice~ I'll mark this as the definitive starting point in their future relationship! It makes the fangirl in me squeal with joy!!!

Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 26 2009, 20:13:20 UTC

I feel better, maybe my error went unnoticed ;D Thanks!

Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 16:00:11 UTC

This is really sweet~ looking forward to more!

Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 26 2009, 20:14:02 UTC

Thanks! Trying to make regular updates :)

Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 22:48:51 UTC

loved this anon! keep it up! :D

Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 26 2009, 20:14:15 UTC

Thank you! :)

Re: Fool's Paradise [3d/3d] anonymous August 25 2009, 23:01:40 UTC

loved this anon! keep it up! :D

OP anonymous August 26 2009, 06:20:55 UTC

*A* I am truly loving this so far. You got Naoto's characterization EXACTLY how I wanted it (and Rise's too, but I'm hugely picky about Naoto!) and just hdkskdhfjfk have my firstborn plz?

And especially since he doesn't seem interested in Risette, she thinks - then immediately winces. Modest as ever, Rise.
Another random line I really liked. I just thought it showed a really human/realistic kind of thought process...that kind of almost-conceit I think most have in the back of their head sometimes, and then the instant revision. Idek I just love your writing 8)

I'm always so sad when the chapters are over ;A; but it gives me something to look forward to! This is really A+, anon, I couldn't have dreamed of anything better :>

ps. captcha sez, 28% deadpan. ffff if we're talking about Naoto, I think it's a lot more than that 8|

Re: OP anonymous August 26 2009, 20:19:23 UTC

Hey OP! I am very, very glad you like it so far :) And that you like Naoto's characterization, especially since she's being portrayed from Rise's viewpoint.

Trying to keep Rise sympathetic, too - she tends to get a hard time from some fans, but she's actually a really interesting character. (And this is never-met-Shadow Rise, as well, quite a few insecurities going on.)

Thanks so much for the comments, too, I will try to keep the standard up (and yeah, captcha is WAY off ;))

Fool's Paradise (4a/4c) anonymous August 26 2009, 19:57:17 UTC

at least one chapter today, maybe another one tonight. Thanks again, commenting!anons :)For reasons she's not quite willing to admit and which have nothing to do with a certain detective, Rise sleeps lightly that night. Unfortunately, there's no way she can skip school the next day without worrying her grandmother; she did that before, back when she was still a nobody and even the teachers barely noticed, and Grandma would consider it a bad sign. There's only a few days till the end of the semester anyway - and after that, she'll spend a thrilling summer working in the shop ( ... )

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