bad fic: The grass was emerald and the sky was cerulean and their love was black.

[alleecamcat]

Hi! I've been a lurker here for a while. While crusing the Supernatural fandom I came across this lovely fic. It's RPS although not explicit. This line at the end of the first paragraph let me know I was in for a good read:

The grass was emerald and the sky was cerulean and their love was black.I love the dot-to-dot trees, the 'ya knows' & the

Comments

[msmollusk]

I blame Derwent art pencils. I got the mega 72 pencil set for christmas one year and forever since it's been "blah blah Straw Yellow this" and "blah blah Burnt Umber that."

The rest of the fic problems are to be blamed solely on the writer.

[alleecamcat]

OMG! Colored pencils as inspiration for a slash fic!!! Usually writers go for something a little...er....thicker to use as a muse.

*coughs* Moving on. Thanks for the insight! I enjoyed it almost as much as the bad fic!

[almightychrissy]

What's really sad is that, properly done, the "ya know"s and the "you see"s could have created a really nifty narrative style, but there, they do not.

[alleecamcat]

I agree 100%. I think the writer has an interesting voice, y'know?

Reading through the comments I couldn't help but think that her friends weren't doing her any favor. How is a writer supposed to improve if even their friends won't, gently, offer some constructive criticism?