Comments | badfic_quotes: bad description by an otherwise good author

panthersoup in badfic_quotes

bad description by an otherwise good author

Jun 02, 2010 19:59

Matt watched Mello as he slept, the jagged strands of hair splattered across the pillow like a golden halo of blood.

Not only is his hair just like a "golden halo", it's also... Made of blood? Golden blood, what?

death note

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caelith June 3 2010, 09:32:14 UTC

O_o

cheryl_bites June 3 2010, 11:14:32 UTC

>_< I could take "his hair was like a golden halo" OR "his hair was splattered across the pillow like a pool of blood", but not both in the same sentence.

ran_mouri82 June 3 2010, 15:46:22 UTC

Agreed 100%. Especially the latter, because it's Mello.

chelonianmobile June 3 2010, 16:27:22 UTC

Is that a My Immortal icon?

cheryl_bites June 3 2010, 16:41:03 UTC

No, it was a typo that someone made YEARS ago on Deleterius, and I found it funny enough to make into an icon. Did My Immortal have St Mango's as well? If so, it is automatically EVEN BETTER.

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ze_zana June 5 2010, 01:59:19 UTC

One of these things is not like the other~