I was going to go to bed but
This wasn't going to spork itself.
MEMORY LOSS!
A little girl is founded by L and his little minis. She can't remember a thing but they remember her from their past. What stupid ideas can L and the minis come up with to jog her memory. this is rated 'M' if you can't take cussing you wimps.
1. L founds a little girl. He's all about giving back to the community. Maybe she's a charity?
2. Calling me a wimp does not encourage me to read your story.
3. L AND HIS LITTLE MINIS.
Inside, the situation became more serious:
I was in a living room, 6 people were there and they all looked really creepy.
One was pale with panda eyes and black hair.
There was a blonde wearing leather and a rosary.
A red- head wearing stripes with goggles.
An albino twirling his hair playing with a robot.
And two old dudes.
I particularly like how when she gets to L and Watari, she just goes 'and two old dudes'.
"She looks like hell." Leather said.
THAT'S IT!
"WHAT THE FUCK, YOU LOOK LIKE HELL, YOU UGLY FAGGOT TOY!" I screamed.
Okay, on this girl's profile, she says she's 10. So at first, I felt kinda bad about sporking her fic. But then I realised that this particular ten year old has already called me a wimp and then gone on to abuse my eyes with random caps lock. Now I feel better.
Then stripes went up to me and said: "Listen, I don't know who you are, but you can't just come in here and start cussing him out."
Wtf, whats his problem.
I think potentially it has something to do with the fact that you are shouting at his friend. Also, these guys 'know her from their past', but Matt (at least, I'm assuming that's who stripes is) doesn't know who she is?
"Excuse me, stripes, but I was taken here by someone and I get accused of fuckin' 'coming in here and cussing him out', yeah I used him out but that doesn't mean….. ok I forgot what I was about to say."
YEAH I USED HIM OUT. I DON'T CARE. I'M SO HARDCORE. Wait...the AUTHOR forgot what she was about to say?
"How the hell am I suppose to know, who are you guys?"
" I'm L"
"I'm Near."
"I'm Mello."
"I'm Matt."
"I'm Wat-"
"I really don't care who you are. But do I know you." I said.
"But you just asked," L said. The girl's odd, erratic behaviour was arousing his suspicions. There was a forty percent chance she was Kira.
"Ok what if I say Mello."
"leather, faggot and thong."
He cocked his head.
"He's wearing a lacey thong, WOMAN UNDERWEAR!,Mello is a big woman, lady, man"
"is that right." L said.
I nodded and pointed towards were Matt and Mello were having a really hot make-out session.
I want so badly for this to be a troll. I just doubt so much that it is.
"No, I mean, me as in L."
"sexy, shirtless, sex- If you don't put a shirt on then I'll rape you." I said.
SHE'S TEN. TEEEEEEEEN. Either this is a troll or - or I don't want children any more. Oh yeah, and two minutes ago, he was just "some old guy"!
So, I did what Jesus would do and punched him in the gut and went to find the kitchen.
End of the chapter, and finishing on a high note, clearly. At least this sentence is correctly punctuated.
MEMORY LOSS!
A little girl is founded by L and his little minis. She can't remember a thing but they remember her from their past. What stupid ideas can L and the minis come up with to jog her memory. this is rated 'M' if you can't take cussing you wimps.
1. L founds a little girl. He's all about giving back to the community. Maybe she's a charity?
2. Calling me a wimp does not encourage me to read your story.
3. L AND HIS LITTLE MINIS.
Inside, the situation became more serious:
I was in a living room, 6 people were there and they all looked really creepy.
One was pale with panda eyes and black hair.
There was a blonde wearing leather and a rosary.
A red- head wearing stripes with goggles.
An albino twirling his hair playing with a robot.
And two old dudes.
I particularly like how when she gets to L and Watari, she just goes 'and two old dudes'.
"She looks like hell." Leather said.
THAT'S IT!
"WHAT THE FUCK, YOU LOOK LIKE HELL, YOU UGLY FAGGOT TOY!" I screamed.
Okay, on this girl's profile, she says she's 10. So at first, I felt kinda bad about sporking her fic. But then I realised that this particular ten year old has already called me a wimp and then gone on to abuse my eyes with random caps lock. Now I feel better.
Then stripes went up to me and said: "Listen, I don't know who you are, but you can't just come in here and start cussing him out."
Wtf, whats his problem.
I think potentially it has something to do with the fact that you are shouting at his friend. Also, these guys 'know her from their past', but Matt (at least, I'm assuming that's who stripes is) doesn't know who she is?
"Excuse me, stripes, but I was taken here by someone and I get accused of fuckin' 'coming in here and cussing him out', yeah I used him out but that doesn't mean….. ok I forgot what I was about to say."
YEAH I USED HIM OUT. I DON'T CARE. I'M SO HARDCORE. Wait...the AUTHOR forgot what she was about to say?
"How the hell am I suppose to know, who are you guys?"
" I'm L"
"I'm Near."
"I'm Mello."
"I'm Matt."
"I'm Wat-"
"I really don't care who you are. But do I know you." I said.
"But you just asked," L said. The girl's odd, erratic behaviour was arousing his suspicions. There was a forty percent chance she was Kira.
"Ok what if I say Mello."
"leather, faggot and thong."
He cocked his head.
"He's wearing a lacey thong, WOMAN UNDERWEAR!,Mello is a big woman, lady, man"
"is that right." L said.
I nodded and pointed towards were Matt and Mello were having a really hot make-out session.
I want so badly for this to be a troll. I just doubt so much that it is.
"No, I mean, me as in L."
"sexy, shirtless, sex- If you don't put a shirt on then I'll rape you." I said.
SHE'S TEN. TEEEEEEEEN. Either this is a troll or - or I don't want children any more. Oh yeah, and two minutes ago, he was just "some old guy"!
So, I did what Jesus would do and punched him in the gut and went to find the kitchen.
End of the chapter, and finishing on a high note, clearly. At least this sentence is correctly punctuated.