The Worst Digimon Fanfic Ever Written

[firedragon_1321]

I found Digimon's squickiest fic. It's called Digimon Capture Adventure. I have done a full spork, but I won't post it here. Instead, I will post a choice portion of the fic with my pictures edited out (I'm very image-heavy in my sporks). The full version will (at some point) be on my sporking comm. My comments are in bold.

EDIT- Full spork is

Comments

[aprilvalentine]

I know nothing of Digimon fandom, but ... wow. And writing-wise, does the author even realize that the number 7 can actually be spelled out? I know, with all the rest that's a minor nitpick, but when she used the numeral to start a sentence early on, it jumped out at me. You can use numerals for three digit numbers in narrative but even then, you don't start a sentence with numerals.

Aside from that, I had to laugh at the "zombie hand of Rob Lowe" body parts. "A hard dick appeared between his legs" sounds as if the digimon is standing there and some other person's dick is randomly sticking out.

And why, pray tell, would the girl who engineered this lovely scenario because she wanted to see relationships like this just leave before the really "good" stuff happened? Then again, why ask why?