Chapter four: At the barricades

[baeraad]

Okay, so my old plot wasn't working for me. There's no way I could make it to 50,000 words if I stuck to it.

Which means I need to take things off in another direction.

And somehow still have it add up to the situation Dara is in in the prologue.

This is the kind of challenge that makes NaNo so interesting. :D

Comments

[sunlit_music]

I liked how Mystics rely on intuition, contrary to stereotypes. And it was great to see that Artists used their logic as well.

This line cracked me up: Jalon might have talked like a loon later on

I accuse him of reckless endangerment, attempted assault, lewd conduct in a public setting, attempt to incite a riot, irresponsible use of witchcraft, and being too fucking creepy."

Best. Line. Ever. :)

[baeraad]

Hehe, well, part of the fun of having well-defined social categories is to have the members of each one having stereotypical views on all the others, while at the same time resenting the stereotypical views the others have on them. Therein lies the possibility for much bickering that adds nicely to the wordcount. ;)

[yahalomay]

Simliar to anglerfish, I enjoyed the interplay of the stereotypes the Castes have about one another. :)

Some lines that genuinely produced the tingle-down-the-spine reaction:

"Did you foresee that?" she growled to Jalon, straining to be heard over the din.

"Don't we all foresee it?" Jalon said hoarsely. "Every day of our lives, don't we wake up wondering if it will happen today?"

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Then, across at least fifty meters of wall, the gargoyles came to life as one.

Lizards and birds, monkeys and men, medusas and baroque horrors that looked like nothing natural - suddenly, they were no longer statues, but creatures of living stone. Loved those excerpts

[baeraad]

I also continue my love of Rinabaar.

Hee! Rinabaar is a lot of fun to write. He's so stoical and unruffled. :D

See here for the guy that Rinabaar is at least trying to be. ;)

He is a bit jealous of Jalon but doesn't automatically hate him because of it (what? Maturity, even while jealous? Shocking).

Petty resentment of a victorious rival would be most unbecoming of a gentleman. 8)