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This is a little prose piece I'm working on for myarmcanfly, concerning the FUTURE! for Kyu and her character Rom. Actually, the surrounding plot is really just a vehicle for the fable within the story, but that's not important XD ( Read more... )
This is a little prose piece I'm working on for myarmcanfly, concerning the FUTURE! for Kyu and her character Rom. Actually, the surrounding plot is really just a vehicle for the fable within the story, but that's not important XD ( Read more... )
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Just one teensy little edit I might bring your attention: "...His Rockstar was mortal, after all, and mortals had a perplexing tendency to die less than a decade after birth from age, of all things...." Century? Not decade? Decade is ten years. xDD
Andddd, in the same paragraph, "... The Rockstar was no different. He had lived a good long life and died an old, old man, and when his span of years was up, he had died..." Just a -bit- repetitive. xDD
*is your friendly neighborhood editor?* I'm a pain, really. xDDD But I love it!! I can't wait to read moreeee! I love zee Fox Thief! >w
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