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[aux_head]

Fandom: Viva La Bam
Pairing: Bam/Missy Ryan/Bam
Title: Quimera
Prompt: Bam asks Ryan if it is the time to propose to Missy

Comments

[mildly_neurotic]

It's a bit hard to read the way you have formatted it. Why have you set up your dialog like an outline instead of proper paragraphs with quotation marks?

[aux_head]

O: ~ im sorry if it's hard. Well, I always use outlines, so all the fanfic i've read.

I know some people use quotation, the next chapter im using them :D

[mildly_neurotic]

No need to apologize. It just makes it look like the summary for a story instead of the story. :-)

[mildly_neurotic]

Looking back I hope the questioning of the format didn't totally discourage you. It was meant as constructive criticism, but I know that can be overwhelming.

[jikhyun]

loved bam and dunn as a couple followed by ville and bam. will admit unlike jen I didna hate missy but can live without her being with bam.

cute but confusing

[poison_girl12]

The fanfiction is adorable, no doubt about it and I'd love to read a sequel but it's kinda confusing to read. Like not only the formatting, but the way you wrote a few things are confusing about the meaning