Well, I just read this whole story in one sitting and it was a cracking good read.
First of all- I thought the story itself- the plotting- was well-done. I suck at plot myself, so I always appreciate it when it's done well. Making the jumping off point that place where there seems to be a lack of trust between Buffy and Angel was a great place to start. Buffy and Angel have issues (certainly), but you’ve given them a tense place to begin working through them.
I like your use of the dialogue from the show- for the most part it emphasized what was going on internally with the characters. Sometimes it seemed extraneous, but mostly I thought you used it well.
This story also hit a few of my personal B/A kinks- particularly during the sex scenes (which I thought were nicely done, btw- mine tend to be much more graphic, but yours were a lovely depiction of them at their most intimate.)
Stuff like this pushes all my buttons: “Let it happen, baby,” he instructed in her ear on a murmur, his tongue snaking out to lick her jaw
( ... )
I have a big old yen for broken Angel- tha man who so wants to atone, the man who keeps trying to get it right…and the man whose head and heart is filled with regret. This might have been melodramatic, but it really wasn’t.
And this line was totally hot: “Mo chroí. Ta gra agam ort. Mo anamchara,” he whispered against her fevered skin.
I think you did an excellent job of capturing Buffy’s voice in the scene with the PTB.
This made me laugh out loud: “Are you fucking kidding me?” she demanded. “I’m not a cat here, people, I don’t have nine lives. What does it take for you all to just let me stay dead?”
And this was *so* Buffy: “Things happened differently than they were meant to. Angel was meant to be your friend, your protector and nothing more until he received his Shanshu. Only then were the two of you meant to fall in love. You never have been one for following the rules, though. A Slayer, in love with a vampire. Who could have foretold that
( ... )
Wow. Thank you so much, Chrislee! Your comments mean so much to me, given this was my first real dive into this fandom in terms of writing.
Of course you can archive it at Sublime, I'm incredibly honored. Like, you have no idea how honored. :) I'll get it compressed over the next few days and sent to you.
Again, thank you. I'm sorry I'm not more articulate, I'm just a bit speechless over here.
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First of all- I thought the story itself- the plotting- was well-done. I suck at plot myself, so I always appreciate it when it's done well. Making the jumping off point that place where there seems to be a lack of trust between Buffy and Angel was a great place to start. Buffy and Angel have issues (certainly), but you’ve given them a tense place to begin working through them.
I like your use of the dialogue from the show- for the most part it emphasized what was going on internally with the characters. Sometimes it seemed extraneous, but mostly I thought you used it well.
This story also hit a few of my personal B/A kinks- particularly during the sex scenes (which I thought were nicely done, btw- mine tend to be much more graphic, but yours were a lovely depiction of them at their most intimate.)
Stuff like this pushes all my buttons:
“Let it happen, baby,” he instructed in her ear on a murmur, his tongue snaking out to lick her jaw ( ... )
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And this line was totally hot: “Mo chroí. Ta gra agam ort. Mo anamchara,” he whispered against her fevered skin.
I think you did an excellent job of capturing Buffy’s voice in the scene with the PTB.
This made me laugh out loud: “Are you fucking kidding me?” she demanded. “I’m not a cat here, people, I don’t have nine lives. What does it take for you all to just let me stay dead?”
And this was *so* Buffy:
“Things happened differently than they were meant to. Angel was meant to be your friend, your protector and nothing more until he received his Shanshu. Only then were the two of you meant to fall in love. You never have been one for following the rules, though. A Slayer, in love with a vampire. Who could have foretold that ( ... )
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Of course you can archive it at Sublime, I'm incredibly honored. Like, you have no idea how honored. :) I'll get it compressed over the next few days and sent to you.
Again, thank you. I'm sorry I'm not more articulate, I'm just a bit speechless over here.
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