Comments | bar_ohki: Caught up in a Love Game

bar_ohki

Caught up in a Love Game

Feb 14, 2011 14:31

This is my first attempt at a fic for hiruma_x_mamori 's Valentine's Day contest. I decided I didn't like it and redid the entire thing. I just thought I should post it for the sake of everyone's enjoyment.

Caught up in a Love Game

( Clifford decided this had gotten more than a bit out of hand- Hiruma really needed to keep him out of his spats. )

es21, hiruma, hirumamo, fanfic, fanfiction, es 21, mamori, eyeshield 21

Comments 6

tashlliya February 15 2011, 16:30:43 UTC

Ohoho, I like this story even better! For same reason, it looks to me you were having much more fun writing this one! You can sure work Cliford and make him run for his life (in a non-running way of course). And two of them making out, where did that come from? XD Agon sure got what he deserved in the end... Just hilarious!

bar_ohki February 15 2011, 16:35:17 UTC

I did enjoy writing this one a lot. I wrote it up in bits and pieces during what was a particularly gruel music paper. It just feels a little too cracky for the Valentine's prompt. But I wanted to share anyways.

And as for the making out, well, I had this vision of Clifford making out with everyone in a room full of football players and I realized I envisioned him as bisexual. So making out with Hiruma to prove a point? XD Not that hard a leap from there.

I'm really glad you liked it.

cherry_tiger February 16 2011, 02:33:43 UTC

Hahahaha! Oh my gosh, this was pretty crack-ish indeed. The "accidental" kiss sure didn't help things, but it's amusing to see Mamori's "revenge" included totally embarrassing Clifford. What a great way for the both of them to spend Valentine's Day. XD

bar_ohki February 16 2011, 02:49:48 UTC

I love it when I write crack because its well-written crack and is totally disguised as an excellent story. But still, conceptually, it falls in the crack category.

Glad you liked it!

immortalizepain February 16 2011, 08:13:34 UTC

Hahaha... this one is really such a nice piece of work. I can barely contain my laughter while reading this one.

Poor Hiruma, being sexually harassed by Clifford. Not just that but that guy also stole Hiruma's fist kiss. Hahaha, I could only imagine the expression of mortification on Hiruma's face when he realized what Clifford just did to him.

bar_ohki February 16 2011, 14:34:05 UTC

This one falls into bar_ohki's crack fic. I don't exactly write stories that have the characters being OOC and crazy without writing them well. The plot of this story is pretty crack, but I still wrote a good story.

Isn't that full of win?

Anyhoo, I have this vision of some story where Clifford gets very drunk and makes out with everyone else in the room, willingly or unwillingly. Since then Clifford has always been bisexual in my head and is liable to do these sort of things. It's amusing to have Hiruma get taken advantage of.