"Don't ask me 'what'. Never ask 'what'. The answer to that won't tell you anything. It's like looking at someone's clothes and house and then pretending that you know them. All circumstance
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I like it. Though I wanted it to be something more. something bigger. Mostly, I wanted to know why our narrator's boss got the hit put on louie. It tastes like a good portion of something larger, except for the end you placed on it. Almost forced. As if you demanded the bigger idea be something small and, what i call "flash-fiction."
but that's just how it seems.
Did a good job of giving our narrator a voice other than your own. I liked that quite a bit. caught a lot of the noir feel to it (which i'm pretty sure is what you were going for)... worked well for you. Dialogue sounds realistic, which is a plus.... What the fuck are Fripperies?
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but that's just how it seems.
Did a good job of giving our narrator a voice other than your own. I liked that quite a bit. caught a lot of the noir feel to it (which i'm pretty sure is what you were going for)... worked well for you. Dialogue sounds realistic, which is a plus.... What the fuck are Fripperies?
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1. Pretentious, showy finery.
2. Pretentious elegance; ostentation.
3. Something trivial or nonessential.
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