I'm just giving it a shot

May 31, 2005 01:19

I'm takin' a leaf our of Ian's book and trying a poem. I hope you guys ( Read more... )

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forzedelmale May 30 2005, 23:47:40 UTC
What if...I don't really know.

I liked it. It's simple, but it sounds nice and it hits home for a lot of people. It's a secret whether or not it did for me. :p

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lovinglara13 May 31 2005, 09:13:07 UTC
i like it! very nice. But my dear blair why are you awake at 1:19 in the morning! sleep is vummy! but i do love you poem. specially the last line!

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mochajoy13 May 31 2005, 16:21:16 UTC
Other than the grating lack of question marks after direct questions? ;) I liked it. Nicely done. You should write MORE POETRY! Though perhaps not in the middle of the night, when you should be at least SLEEPING or MAKING UP YOUR MATH HOMEWORK. Or something. :D

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dcbooks538 May 31 2005, 18:15:37 UTC
Very nice. Very 1 am, but still very nice.

Don't get mad at me, I can't help myself: 5th stanza, 1st line, make it "hadn't". you changed tenses for one line.

Sorry. Not my poem, shouldn't do that.

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xcduck3698 May 31 2005, 18:18:57 UTC
hiya blair! it's tara...sorry if this seems creepish..but i really would like to get to know you better and this is an attempt so yes. adding you.

What if...
I left tomorrow
I was gone forever
Would you remember my smile and the way I made you feel
Would I have left something on your heart

that's exactly..exactly how i feel..well how i will feel when i leave. i love when people..such as yourself..can understand so many situations and perspectives..maybe you've been through a lot...but either way lovely job!

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redbop May 31 2005, 20:51:56 UTC
.......Blair that's what we talked about...it made me cry

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