Other than the grating lack of question marks after direct questions? ;) I liked it. Nicely done. You should write MORE POETRY! Though perhaps not in the middle of the night, when you should be at least SLEEPING or MAKING UP YOUR MATH HOMEWORK. Or something. :D
hiya blair! it's tara...sorry if this seems creepish..but i really would like to get to know you better and this is an attempt so yes. adding you.
What if... I left tomorrow I was gone forever Would you remember my smile and the way I made you feel Would I have left something on your heart
that's exactly..exactly how i feel..well how i will feel when i leave. i love when people..such as yourself..can understand so many situations and perspectives..maybe you've been through a lot...but either way lovely job!
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I liked it. It's simple, but it sounds nice and it hits home for a lot of people. It's a secret whether or not it did for me. :p
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Don't get mad at me, I can't help myself: 5th stanza, 1st line, make it "hadn't". you changed tenses for one line.
Sorry. Not my poem, shouldn't do that.
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What if...
I left tomorrow
I was gone forever
Would you remember my smile and the way I made you feel
Would I have left something on your heart
that's exactly..exactly how i feel..well how i will feel when i leave. i love when people..such as yourself..can understand so many situations and perspectives..maybe you've been through a lot...but either way lovely job!
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