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bbmgirlfan

Teenagers in Love, Chapter Three

Jun 02, 2006 13:53

Title: Teenagers in Love
Pairing: Heath & Jake
Rating: PG?
Disclaimer: I don't know any of these people. I'm totally making it all up!

Author's Note: Heath and Jake meet as teenagers. The story begins and ends long before Brokeback Mountain. Thanks to Lola and Heather for beta feedback!! To read the previous chapters, click on my LJ link. I have no ( Read more... )

Comments 15

That was terrific!!! george66 June 2 2006, 18:46:52 UTC

You perfectly capture the awkwardness, curiousity, excitement and thrill at discovery the sexuality of youth in the minds of teenagers! But soon I'm also sure we are going to get the angst of love as only teenagers can suffer!! Thank God I'm not a teenager anymore!! Oh the suffering!!!!!!!!!!

GEORGE

Re: That was terrific!!! bbmgirlfan June 2 2006, 21:18:30 UTC

Thank you so much! That is such a wonderful compliment coming from you because I know you don't mess around when giving feedback :).

Yes, there is angst coming and it was SO hard to write!

Thanks for reading!

Re: That was terrific!!! george66 June 2 2006, 23:38:32 UTC

Believe me bbmgirlfan, its a pleasure making comments on stories as wonderful as your's.

GEORGE

Re: That was terrific!!! bbmgirlfan June 3 2006, 00:35:30 UTC

Awww, bless you, George!!:)

kipperoo153 June 2 2006, 19:03:52 UTC

That was brill mate! Its different which is what I like about it, I love that they're younger, pleas carry this on real soon its really good, thanks

bbmgirlfan June 2 2006, 21:19:37 UTC

Thanks! :)

I initially just wanted to avoid Michelle (LOL) but then loved getting to know their innocence.

I'm glad you're reading it!

under_wyo_skies June 2 2006, 19:04:48 UTC

Oooo- this is great! I just caught up on the three chapters :) Wonderful stuff :)

So sexy and exciting when neither of them knows what could happen,a nd then to find themselves just having the most wonderful experience :)

bbmgirlfan June 2 2006, 21:20:48 UTC

Helen! I could just hug you!!

Thank you. You have no idea what your positive feedback means to me.

Jeanine

poisonshock June 3 2006, 11:45:18 UTC

i love your descriptions: "Heath brushed Jake's cheek with his thumb and something warm, soft, sensual and sweet passed between them" or the 3rd presence in the room- loneliness. beautiful writing and i'm enjoying this immensely! anticipating the next part!

ky77ccl August 26 2006, 00:35:58 UTC

This was incredibly sweet and incredibly lovely!

bbmgirlfan August 26 2006, 01:24:34 UTC

Awww, thank you!:)