Souvenirs

[beldarzfixon]

It turns out an alternative answer to the old joke is “Seventh Avenue at 57th Street.”

But it was not the stage or even a seat at a show the young woman sought in her first visit to to Carnegie Hall, just the administrative offices -- like those of any arts institution, except the framed posters on the wall were a bit more prestigious.

She sat a

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[beldarzfixon]

Thank you!

[i_17bingo]

There isn't much in this short exchange, but you still manage to make Maria a strong character I'd like to see more of. I'm not sure how you did that...

[beldarzfixon]

My journalism background conditioned me to writing tight, less is more, etc. Also, that old advice to stay active voice as much as possible.

Maria has often leaned on her mother's courage to shore up her own, especially in the last year as caretaker. Now she is finding her own voice, shedding her skin - so to speak - in shoebox form and becoming the shining "souvenir" of her own journey. Btw, I envisioned this taking place at around 1990, with Maria at 28 years old.

[lolaslaughter]

I really love the idea of her thinking of herself as her very own souvenir! Being able to cherish the memories without having to have specific "things" around to actually remind you is beautiful. 😁😁

[beldarzfixon]

Thank you!

[d0gs]

this was lovely and that last line was perfect!

[beldarzfixon]

Thanks!

[eternal_ot]

Beautiful <3 I had a satisfied smile in the end:)