Er, I think you can safely file this under "worked very well, thanks!" The banter was fantastic (oh, Hammond), and then the poetry - !!! You basically had me at "humble bowls" to be quite honest, but then "finding my way into you" nnnngh and "thrumming and drumming" nnnnnnnnnnnnngh. Unbelievably hot. Wow.
And I love James' careful waiting and planning and watching Jeremy's reactions. That's so James and it just makes the mood of this hugely tense and sexy. And I love that we get to see Jeremy being both impatient/careless but also cautious, having to work himself up to what he isn't sure he wants, trying to protect himself, even if he goes about it in the most ridiculous way. Poor boy.
Oh, thank God! Seriously - phew XD Working James up to more explicit poetry is nerve shredding - I'm left feeling incredibly thankful that it isn't a compulsory precursor to sex in real life LOL The man!poetry still makes me panic but I figured if I post this and the world doesn't end, it'll be all right ;P
This is a fantastic start, I can't wait to see where it's going next! I love the idea of them both knowing, but not yet acting, and yet my stomach twisted for poor Jeremy and his jealousy.
And I love this characterisation of James, quietly but confidently sexual. It fits nicely with the elements of him they're letting show through in recent seasons, with his penchant for filthy jokes and his sly sense of humour.
And pfft to your worries about the poetry. Reading that, and without even imagining James' voice, I got shivers all over, despite being tucked up in a nice warm bed with an overheating laptop on my lap. So there ;P
*squish* Thanks! This fic has made me paranoid but it's mainly James' fault - he has a filthy mind XD He's always seemed sexually confident to me and I think that's what I like about him - that secret undercurrent of being sure of that about himself.
Yay it wasn't poetry!fail \o/ Thanks for reading - the relief will allow me to post the other chapters ;)
That was my initial reaction to the poetry, but there's so much more to it than that. This has such richness of detail, everyone's fleshed out and exists outside of the story as well as within it. I love the concept, but I also love the people. I can't remember the last time I read anything TGS that had the potential to be as complete as this does without also being overwhelmed with extraneous angst or disappearing up its own arse.
Also, about that bella-is-fail tag... it doesn't belong here XD
You're not supposed to be reading this [you should be writing twinky!pornstars] - but thank you for doing so ;D I'm really glad you liked it hun and hugely relieved the poetry works ;)
I can't promise the next parts won't disappear up their own arse but there's no angst so any accidental pretentiousness is accidental *eep* There's something about playing with poetry that always makes me feel pretentious anyway lol
I absolutely LOVE this. Love all the emotions and feelings between James and Jeremy and the very thought of James whispering those words... excuse me whilst I faint a little bit. Dialogue and EVERYTHING is amazing. Did I mention I wanted more?
It's very, very sexy in such an emotional way - way to get me going, Miss B!
I'm really glad you liked it - it's been making me paranoid this fic so I'm happy it worked! More? Well I should post part 2 soon now that I'm feeling a bit less scared XD Thanks for reading it x
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Er, I think you can safely file this under "worked very well, thanks!" The banter was fantastic (oh, Hammond), and then the poetry - !!! You basically had me at "humble bowls" to be quite honest, but then "finding my way into you" nnnngh and "thrumming and drumming" nnnnnnnnnnnnngh. Unbelievably hot. Wow.
And I love James' careful waiting and planning and watching Jeremy's reactions. That's so James and it just makes the mood of this hugely tense and sexy. And I love that we get to see Jeremy being both impatient/careless but also cautious, having to work himself up to what he isn't sure he wants, trying to protect himself, even if he goes about it in the most ridiculous way. Poor boy.
Basically: I LOVE THIS. YOU ARE AMAZING.
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Seriously - phew XD
Working James up to more explicit poetry is nerve shredding - I'm left feeling incredibly thankful that it isn't a compulsory precursor to sex in real life LOL The man!poetry still makes me panic but I figured if I post this and the world doesn't end, it'll be all right ;P
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Thanks - for reading and for not hating it XD
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And I love this characterisation of James, quietly but confidently sexual. It fits nicely with the elements of him they're letting show through in recent seasons, with his penchant for filthy jokes and his sly sense of humour.
And pfft to your worries about the poetry. Reading that, and without even imagining James' voice, I got shivers all over, despite being tucked up in a nice warm bed with an overheating laptop on my lap. So there ;P
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Thanks! This fic has made me paranoid but it's mainly James' fault - he has a filthy mind XD He's always seemed sexually confident to me and I think that's what I like about him - that secret undercurrent of being sure of that about himself.
Yay it wasn't poetry!fail \o/ Thanks for reading - the relief will allow me to post the other chapters ;)
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That was my initial reaction to the poetry, but there's so much more to it than that. This has such richness of detail, everyone's fleshed out and exists outside of the story as well as within it. I love the concept, but I also love the people. I can't remember the last time I read anything TGS that had the potential to be as complete as this does without also being overwhelmed with extraneous angst or disappearing up its own arse.
Also, about that bella-is-fail tag... it doesn't belong here XD
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I can't promise the next parts won't disappear up their own arse but there's no angst so any accidental pretentiousness is accidental *eep* There's something about playing with poetry that always makes me feel pretentious anyway lol
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I absolutely LOVE this. Love all the emotions and feelings between James and Jeremy and the very thought of James whispering those words... excuse me whilst I faint a little bit. Dialogue and EVERYTHING is amazing. Did I mention I wanted more?
It's very, very sexy in such an emotional way - way to get me going, Miss B!
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I'm really glad you liked it - it's been making me paranoid this fic so I'm happy it worked! More? Well I should post part 2 soon now that I'm feeling a bit less scared XD
Thanks for reading it x
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