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FIC: The Forest Whispers Secrets Left Untold

Mar 14, 2009 19:03

Greetings. I'm new one here. (Thank Gods I don't look like Harry or there would be some ...initiation rites.)

AUTHOR: ms_anthrophyTITLE: The Forest Whispers Secrets Left Untold ( Read more... )

Comments 5

luciusmistress March 19 2009, 02:53:22 UTC

Psst, hon! "...Harry somuch hoped for a painful curse..." You might want to add a space :)

Sorry for still being so beta-y (It's SO a word!)... Still love this to bits! Love everything about it. Nothing better than Lucius taunting Harry while he's fucking him with Harry's permission ;) And the Cruciatus...well, you know how I feel about Cruciatus!sex (siistii...) :)

ms_anthrophy March 19 2009, 11:16:31 UTC

Thanks, hon. So I guess this was a good unbirthday present:)

Of course beta-y is a word and thx for correcting that ...though I can always blame it all on you betaing the text with eh... only one hand ;D

luciusmistress March 19 2009, 14:07:07 UTC

Totally a good unbirthday present!

Actually, I think you fucked that up when you did the italics, so it's not my fault :) Nothing is ever my fault! And I never beta with one hand XD Trust me, I'm a dentist :D

calairiel April 4 2009, 17:01:40 UTC

I did like this.. So much better than most dub-con fics I have read. Where they put up a teensy bit of fight and then just embrace the person who's doing them like it happens every day and is a normal occurance. It's so annoying. It's called dub-con for a reason!

But what I would have liked more is abit more story at the end.. I felt like I didn't get much closure..

But other than that! It's a great story!! well done!

Thanks for feedback. ms_anthrophy April 4 2009, 22:59:52 UTC

(new version because of my mistakes with italics)

Very nice to hear (umm.. read) that you liked my story. *bows*

"it's called dub-con for a reason"

Very good point there. Dubious consent is rather difficult to write well and I am quite proud of this, especially as there were no spells or lust potions, just mindfuck. (Well... except for the Cruciatus curse but I have this thing for Cruciatus!sex.)

I don't know about the end... it felt right but I could have added some more angst!Harry there... *evil smirk* but Lucius just did not feel like hanging around there anymore after he had got what he wanted. More description of the scene including Voldie-honey maybe... Anyway, constructive criticism is love.