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[bernhardt]

Hi, whats with me posting on Livejournal all the time now? I need help. Please read my first draft of my

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[marnacharmer]

It's really well-written, detailed yet telling them exactly what they want to hear. I like the way you've linked in additional information about yourself in relation to photograhpy.
I don't remember writing my personal statement too much, apart from the fact it was hell, but (and this is me trying to remember so I'm more asking a question of you than giving a critiscism, it probably isn't relevant), is it all supposed to be about the subject you want to take? I know it's essentially selling yourself as a photographer to the university, and you have put a lot of yourself into the statement but could there be more of you, perhaps not to do with photography. ??

[the_lonely]

jeepers creepers your personal statement is amazing! mine was such a pile of poo, trying to eke out something of worth from going to girl guides and church!

[foofoofoo]

that's pretty good. i don't think i am in a position to give you any criticism, and i cant think of any. good job.

where are you applying?

fx

your personal statement

[anonymous]

Well where to begin? Where is your paragraph about your foundation year? Any good art degree will require you to talk about the broad knowledge of visual communication learnt in the different areas taught in foundation. And you might want to mention also how your work has progressed from a-level as the first thing they teach you in foundation is how to forget everything you've learnt at a-level. So the only thing I can find wrong with this statement (as an ex-camberwellian myself) is your lack of reference to your foundation year..so add a couple of paragraphs on that otherwise they won't look at you twice..and you might want to tone down the boasting about your camera collection. Good luck

Re: your personal statement

[bernhardt]

yeah, and who are you?
I haven't done a Foundation year. So it's not something I can talk about. This statement supports an application for various Photography degrees not requiring a Foundation year and two Foundation degrees - one in Photojournalism and one in Fashion Photography.
I wouldn't say I was "boasting" about my camera collection. That paragraph intends to show how I am open to experimentation and eager to push the boundaries. I'm open-minded. Perhaps it was worded wrong but I think it's a valid point to make, I have devoted a lot of time and money to benefit my understanding of photography.
Please don't post anonymously in future.

Re: your personal statement

[anonymous]

I quote "honestly please post anonymously if you have to".Perhaps I posted anonymously because I don't know you and I don't intend to get to know you. From your reply it sounds as if you have a bit of an attitude problem. I wasn't trying to be offensive or intrusive, and I think it's great that youre really passionate about photography...But if you can't handle constructive critisism then you're not going to get far in the art world and perhaps you should have just headed your message- "only reply if your going to lick my arse", as it appears that's all you're after, you jumped up little twat. Well good luck..let's see how far you get.

Re: your personal statement

[bernhardt]

Ha, I admit I did forget that I suggested the anonymity. I'll accept that point and I apologise. However it sounds like you're the one with the attitude problem, because in my previous comment I took your suggestions at face value and clearly explained why i wasn't including them - it's not that I can't handle constructive criticism, its the simple fact that i can't talk about foundation because i have no experience of it, and i don't feel there was any sign of "boasting" when it came to my cameras. I wasn't been a dick about what you said, i just didn't appreciate the way you said it, and likewise with this. Jumped up little twat? you don't know me. Comment anonymously giving me pointers for my PS but don't do it as a convenient means to insult me.