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My heart my heart
Apr 03, 2010 02:37
My heart i pulled it from my chest (
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immoral_lust
April 24 2010, 20:29:01 UTC
These lines need work.
look upon did it your cold eyes
(did you mean to have is read look upon it did your cold eyes)
either way without her I couldn't live
(I don't like starting the line with either way, and I don't like the contraction)
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look upon did it your cold eyes
(did you mean to have is read look upon it did your cold eyes)
either way without her I couldn't live
(I don't like starting the line with either way, and I don't like the contraction)
Reply
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