My heart my heart

Apr 03, 2010 02:37

My heart i pulled it from my chest ( Read more... )

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immoral_lust April 24 2010, 20:29:01 UTC
These lines need work.

look upon did it your cold eyes
(did you mean to have is read look upon it did your cold eyes)

either way without her I couldn't live
(I don't like starting the line with either way, and I don't like the contraction)

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