Comments | betelin_notecor: Obsession

betelin_notecor

Obsession

Oct 03, 2008 21:34

Obsession
rating: hard R, ~2,000 words, pairings mentioned: Scorpius/Lily, Scorpius/Rose, Scorpius/Albus, Scorpius/James, Molly/Lucy, Hugo/Louis
WARNINGS: incest, minor dub-con, major mind-fuck

Summary: Scorpius has an obsession.

A/N: OMG, I don't know where this came from. I totally blame snarkyscorp for this because it came out of her b-day prompts. Happy ( Read more... )

ship: james/scorpius, character: lily ii, ship: albus severus/scorpius, character: albus severus, rating: r, character: scorpius, character: hugo, character: molly ii, character: louis, character: lucy, fanfiction: one-shot, character: rose, character: james ii

Comments 74

la_dissonance October 4 2008, 05:25:40 UTC

WOW. wow wow wow. Did not see that ending coming, but it was absolutely perfect. Loved it x a million!!

betelin_notecor October 4 2008, 14:25:42 UTC

Thank you! :) I'm glad you liked it, and that the ending worked for you! ♥

ura_hd October 4 2008, 07:14:19 UTC

this is funny in a morbid way

betelin_notecor October 4 2008, 14:26:28 UTC

lol, it is a little funny. I'd just like to see Draco's face after finding out that his hating the Weasleys/Potters made his son go crazy. XD

maevemist October 4 2008, 09:01:02 UTC

Oh my well that was different.

I was just saying how much I love your James and that no matter what you couldn't do him 'badly' and I am glad to say I didn't lie. He isn't very nice in this but that is the whole point right? He was only being that way to help his family and teach Scorpius that no-one messes with his family and gets away with it.

This is really well done but I have to admit I didn't like it very much because it made me feel dirty but then again I guess that is part of the point.

I do not want you to think I am being nasty or terrible towards your writing or you personally I am just offering my honest opinion. If you do not want this comment to remain here feel free to delete it.

betelin_notecor October 4 2008, 14:29:52 UTC

*hugs* Bah, everyone's entitled to an opinion, and I totally get it if the mindfuck makes you feel fucked. XD It is kind of the point, but not everyone likes feeling that way. Of course I won't delete your comment. *hugs again*

And I like the James here. XDDD He's all creepy and obsessive and protective. Even if he's a bad guy, he's kind of a good guy. I guess? XD I dunno... I just kinda wrote him and he came out that way. =P

maevemist October 4 2008, 14:33:43 UTC

I totally get it if the mindfuck makes you feel fucked. XD

How eloquent of you lol my sentiments exactly.

James is still James no matter how twisted he is, this is whay we like him so much yes?

betelin_notecor October 4 2008, 14:40:12 UTC

Of course. James is always just James. XD

oddnari October 4 2008, 09:10:22 UTC

There's something just so brilliantly evil about this. Loved the poetic justice @ the end. If I may suggest, you really should make this into a longer fic, draw out the tensions, the creepiness.

Teensy quibble: How did Lily remember Scorpius's avowal of love if she was Obliviated? There does not seem to be a pattern of the nature of his Obliviates.

betelin_notecor October 4 2008, 14:33:55 UTC

Oh... I wish I could expand it, I really do, but I have so many fics already in progress that I really can't. :( Perhaps someday in the distant future. XD ( ... )

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betelin_notecor October 4 2008, 14:39:28 UTC

YES. James/Scorpius is SO much better than AS/S. (It's my mission to convert the world to J/S. XDD) And yay! You picked me to read! *hugs*

And I know it's short... I wanted to write more, but three of my livelongnmarry fics are due this month and I've hardly started two of them! *panics*

I'm glad you liked it though, and I'm really glad you're back-ish! *hugs*