lovely dude. absolutely lovely, so poignant it almost moved me to the point of tears. everytime i read it felt this knot in my chest, i know i'm an over senti oprah watching time, but its so beautiful. makes me miss ria so much.
and also makes me think that you seriously need some real romance, get out of NITK and get yourself a woman that you can seriously care for.
oh and one more thing.. this one will be a big hit with the chicks. good stuff!:D
hi!was told that i'd like this;-)..and i did!!awesome stuff! and i do agree with another thing sahil said..this would do well with the girls:-D anywayz..cya round-ria
Critique in Doggerel Haiku.sonataindicaDecember 10 2004, 06:46:58 UTC
Pi,that's a STORY! You don't write often enough, Get the ink flowing!
Notice how the mention of the word "ink" in the third line brings about a surreal vision of a feather floating down aimlessly in a windles sky. Conclusion: it's summer,baby.
CCCF: our discussion/argument? on haikus and seasons that night.:-)
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and also makes me think that you seriously need some real romance, get out of NITK and get yourself a woman that you can seriously care for.
oh and one more thing.. this one will be a big hit with the chicks. good stuff!:D
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You don't write often enough,
Get the ink flowing!
Notice how the mention of the word "ink" in the third line brings about a surreal vision of a feather floating down aimlessly in a windles sky.
Conclusion: it's summer,baby.
CCCF: our discussion/argument? on haikus and seasons that night.:-)
Your partner in haiku-crime,
mukka.
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