Little Pitchers, Chapter 1

[bews]

Title: Little Pitchers, Chapter 1
Rating: PG for the series (troubled relationships)
Disclaimers: All “Brokeback Mountain” characters belong to the talented people who created them.
Feedback? Yes, please.
Author’s notes: This story is film canon in that it uses character names from and stays within the timeline of the film. The entire story takes place

Comments

[thelastaerie]

Interesting start.... you painted a very clear picture of how Jenny and Junior's homelife is like after the divorce.

Even though I still don't know what direction you're taking us... is it a J&E Au story through these two sisters' POV?

Eve

[neverdone39]

Even though I still don't know what direction you're taking us... is it a J&E Au story

Bews wrote in her author's note that it's film canon.

[bews]

Thanks for the assist. I've updated my author's notes to make the plotline clearer.

[bews]

I appreciate your comments, thanks.

Please see my note below to ohiomyown. This is canon, but not "dead Jack"--it's the girls' POV of things they've seen and heard.

[neverdone39]

...
“It’s all right,” she shrugged.

and

... it was just what you called me. Never gave it another thought.”

Junior is so much Ennis' daughter, isn't she?

I like this. Looking forward to more.

[bews]

Thank you very much. I read someone's suggestion on the boards that she really should be called "Ennis Junior." It suits her.

NEVERTHELESS

[ohiomyown]

I TOO would like to know which direction this is going, please allow the author to answer. Is this CANON in "deadjack"? I wish to know before I begin reading. Thank you very much. jUDY

Re: NEVERTHELESS

[bews]

No, this is absolutely not "dead Jack." It's canon in that it uses the character names and stays within the timeline of the film.

The girls will trade memories of things they've seen and heard, but only up to the point at which this chapter starts--that is, when Junior returns home from the Cassie date. It will not proceed past this point--so there won't be any mention of "the shirts" or Ennis's trailer.

I'm sorry for not making this clear before. I'll change the author's note.

[mariez65]

What a great concept - and a refreshing one. Not much has been written about the girls and their feelings, and the dialogue rings so true for girls that age. There are a lot of different perspectives to the story - thanks for giving us another one. A wonderful start.

Thanks, Marie

[bews]

Thank you, Marie, for such wonderful praise. Your feedback means so much. I really appreciate it.

[jtsbar]

"There were faded impressions that added up to sunshine: crayons and an old blue couch, ice cream cones, trout, fireworks."

Beautiful, beautiful sentence.
And a story that I'm so enjoying, and looking forward to more of.

Thanks!

[bews]

This story would have remained in the cedar chest if not for your encouragement. Thank you.

[jtsbar]

You're very welcome. I sure do hope that cedar chest has a lot more chapters/stories in store.