The Creature
yeah this is like a fucking horrible short story.
but i was bored. so criticize away! god knows i need it with this piece of shit lol
Hiding in the shadow of the night lies a creature. This creature is not like any human or animal i have ever seen before, although it has features of both. Its piercing yellow eyes have nothing but a thin slit ( Read more... )
but i was bored. so criticize away! god knows i need it with this piece of shit lol
Hiding in the shadow of the night lies a creature. This creature is not like any human or animal i have ever seen before, although it has features of both. Its piercing yellow eyes have nothing but a thin slit ( Read more... )
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thats so cool
i like it!
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tell me ANYTHING, no matter how tiny it is, that u would change
i need help to make it perfect.
i might submit it to the abstract =X
should it be longer?
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i'd suggest maybe being a little more descriptive of the creature and explaining the relationship between the creature and the people attacking him at the beginning. the ending is a little hard to understand, so maybe a clearer explanation there? but it is a cool idea for a story :O
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i think its a good length
and you hsould definately submit
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