Broken Souls

[bictory]

Title: Broken Souls
Pairing: Daehyun/Youngjae
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: highlight to read:[character death kinda..? More like dead characters...but not really. Er it'll make sense if you read it OTL]
Word Count: 4.2k
Summary: Just like a puzzle, souls are easier to take apart when one piece is missing.
A/N: pinch hit for kaixian for thebrowniebunch fic exchange! A

Comments

[bictory]

spot for my adorable dongsaeng kaixian ♥ I AM SO HAPPY I WAS ABLE TO WRITE FOR YOU
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[bictory]

hehehe you are the cutest ;u; I am super happy this uh...gave you feelings..? AT ANY RATE I'm glad to hear you are willing to share your cheesecake, that is the highest honor ^^;; especially since I was so unsure of this fic!! I don't write pretty things like you do and I can't stomach writing death without good reason xD the only thing that kept me writing was the ending which I don't even think is satisfying but I kept in mind the entire time I was writing for you xD so hopefully the wanting to beat me with a baseball bat means I did my job xD

cries I want to eat onigiri now....and cheesecake :< pls take responsibility by sending me some :< ahaha I'm glad you liked reaper!Dae in here! I was pretty worried about characterization cause of my time constraint...I was pretty worried about everything actually xD but yay thanks for making me feel better about it :)

I hope you feel better!! I glad this made your day better at least ;~; you are the cutest hehe ^^♥

[greasytree]

This is so beautiful! I love how you tied everything together: reapers then prince!youngjae and servant!daehyun then ts members~
ugh, so beautiful
;~~~;

[bictory]

thank you for saying it's beautiful ;u; I am glad you liked the parallelism hehe. Hopefully they will have a better ending the second (third?) time around :') thanks for reading and commenting! ♥

[zqlin]

"“Daehyun, stop.” Youngjae presses a soft kiss onto Daehyun’s lips, and Daehyun gasps as his heart finally starts beating." THIS MADE ME SO SAD OH GOD CONNIE WHY

the ending tho, the ending of this made me REALLY HAPPY because this was for hyejin and i almost thought you would end it after daehyun disappeared :||| daehyun calling youngjae 'his prince' is so cute uwu

""Thanks for helping me, I really don't know what I'd do without you," Youngjae continues, and all Daehyun’s fears of being treated like a rival disappear as he takes the offered hand." ;______;

[bictory]

yay! I'm glad you liked the ending cause IT WAS SO DONE SO HASTILY. I hope it wasn't too unsatisfying haha;; I know, I don't have Hyejin's nerves of steel, I can't kill my characters, especially not Daehyun ;__; so yeah....one day I'll find good reason to and try to write a fic that'll make people cry. But that is not anytime soon xD sorry for making you sad ;A; I blame Hyejin ;A; hehee but thanks for reading and commenting ^^♥

[thirstingdragon]

Oh my god, this was so amazing. I absolutely adored it!!!!
I admit I was hesitant at first, reaper stories can be so hard to hit the right tone of, BUT THIS WAS JUST ALSFJAKFJAJ'AFA'F!!! I love the tension building between Youngjae and Daehyun, the little parts that were pieces of a greater whole, the entire undercurrent of how there was something more that we just didn't quite know. AND THEN THE CLIMAX! AND THE RESOLUTION! I got IRL goosebumps when I read it. Thank you so, so much for writing this! I really enjoyed reading it!!!

[bictory]

ahh thank you so much ♥ I'm glad you kept reading even if it didn't appeal to you ^^ it makes me feel good when people tell me my writing evoked emotions haha! Thanks for reading and commenting ♥

[michelleisat]

oh my lord. where do i start?

i love, love sweet daejae, and this was so sweet. the boys feel so real in this story, like the real dae and jae were actually a prince and his devoted servant (which fit your surprise ending well). i felt that was a really smart choice of past lives actually! there's something refined about Jae that fits a prince well, and we all know dae is a humble, bighearted, boisterious busan boy :) i actually loved this line you gave Dae:

"Daehyun may not have gotten an education in reading or writing, but his mother taught him to do everything with a willing and subservient heart"

That is so Daehyun, and one of the best things about him. As for Jae, I loved how quiet and calm he was, and how he was unafraid to be matter-of-fact about reality and look for his memories where Dae was too afraid (such a complimentary pair). This was my favourite Jae part:

"Youngjae doesn’t say anything, but there are inexplicable emotions etched in the folds of his frown. He places a hand over Daehyun’s, and they remain in the

[michelleisat]

Youngjae leans against Daehyun’s shoulder while they watch memory-Daehyun get tired, and collapse in the middle of the grass. “It’s that smile again,” Youngjae says. “How come you don’t smile like that anymore?”

Daehyun not smiling??! Unimaginable! Heartbreaking :( And of course, Jae would notice it :D

“Did you ever go back?” Youngjae looks hopeful, like he can live through Daehyun’s memories.

I feel like I get why Daehyun likes Youngjae, because Jae is so solid and supportive. But I don't get a lot about why Jae likes Dae. So this was great. Maybe the real Jae lives vicariously through Daehyun's impulsiveness ...

Youngjae doesn’t say anything, but there are inexplicable emotions etched in the folds of his frown. He places a hand over Daehyun’s, and they remain in the middle of the field for a long time. The nice thing about being dead is that time doesn’t matter anymore.

Awww quietly, unassumingly supportive Jae.

"Daehyun can’t help smiling a little at his enthusiasm. He glances over, and Youngjae also has a fond look on his face

[bictory]

ahh I am so late on this but thank you for this comment! I love your little insights on characterization and feelings, they make me feel like I did something right ^^

still waters run deep that is such a nice metaphor *__* I love that image with Youngjae, he is really a thoughtful kid ♥

I'm so glad that it touched you! I'm sorry about the depression, I hope it didn't give you bad memories ;__; /squeezes you, thanks for sharing ;u;

I feel like it'd be hard for Daehyun to smile earnestly if he doesn't have a heart! So yeah...I don't like the thought of Dae losing his smile though >__<

this is never spam! You are the loveliest! I recognized your name from ask fm I think but this gives me a chance to talk to you so that's awesome :3 thank you for reading and this comment, it makes me smile when I read it ^^ ♥

[michelleisat]

You're welcome! I've been a long-time fan of your writing actually (Stuck on a boat! Proclaiming love from the rooftops! Daejae firsts! Youngjae's tempting cheesecake ... Unicorn!), but I never came out showed you appreciation ... so I thought I should :) You write the sweetest Daejae, all these stories have put a grin on my face, even when I was tired / stressed out.

Ah, you recognise me from ask.fm! Good, that means I can click the like button without feeling shy :D Feel free to leave me stuff there / add me on twitter (@michelleisat) if you wanna chat ... Would love to spazz about the boys more <3