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[_black_narcissa]

Title: Dull
Word count: 100
Rating: G
Character or pairing: Bill/Hermione
Challenge name: Spring Holiday
Author's Note: New at this please be gentle with me ^_^

Comments

[kaz814]

Very cute pieces, both of them. One thing I did notice that could be improved upon is the punctuation.

For instance, here's a line from the first drabble:

“Am I boring ‘mione do you think I’m dull” she couldn’t help but giggle and rest her head on her husbands shoulder looking up the red sky as the sunset.

Properly punctuated, that should read:

"Am I boring, 'Mione? Do you think I'm dull?" She couldn't help but giggle and rest her head on her husband's shoulder, looking up at the red sky as the sun set.

You have some great ideas, but I think that some attention to punctuation (and capitalization - Hogwarts should be capitalized, while spring holiday should not, for instance) would make things look even better.

:)

[_black_narcissa]

thanks for that my beta's away :( but thanks for pointing that out :)

[vejgurl]

Yay for Bill/Hermione :D