Bones Fic: Losing My Religion~ Part 5

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He returns to D.C. burdened by a completely disproportionate sense of guilt. None of this was ever about her permission or her approval, yet she’s given him both. Hard to tell which is worse-her tacit acceptance of the situation, or his own responses to it. Because the truth is that if it were Cam’s dad, or even Angela’s, he probably would have

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[greyslostwho]

OMG, can we swap Hannah for Olivia please? :) You've somehow managed to make her nicer and more believable...

Loved this chapter, especially the confrontation between Booth and Cam. Looking forward to more soon :)

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Thank you so much for the comments! I'm really glad that you are liking Olivia. I find that I would be less annoyed with Show if Hannah was a compelling character, so I'm trying to do that with Olivia.

Booth/Cam are always such a joy for me to write. I appreciate the review!

[farmerliz]

I'm not sure if I've reviewed this story yet. If not, I'm sorry, because this is amazing. Every chapter you ratchet up the tension just a little bit more; you make Booth's position just that much more untenable; and you show us his growing awareness of Bernnan's growth even when he wants to put her back in her 5 years ago box for his own sake so badly he can't stand it. It's like he purposely unlearned everything he knows about her, and everyone knows it.

I also love your use of language and word choice: "questioning if the priorities by which you structure your life," "nurturing a future," "gumption." And that's all just the beginning. After that, I was being swept along by the story and not noticing the mechanics so much, but I'm sure you keep it up.

A wonderful story. Thanks for posting.

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It's like he purposely unlearned everything he knows about her, and everyone knows it.

This is such a perfect way of putting it, and exactly what I'm trying to convey. I'm really glad that you're finding this compelling and that you're enjoying it. I've hit a bit of a stumbling block with my general dissatisfaction with Show right now, but I've had the whole story mapped from the beginning. Hopefully I can get my butt in gear and continue this soon.

Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts!

[a_mistletoe]

Booth is completely flummoxed isn't he?

I like how you've captured what is so frustrating about Bones for me: her inability to be really up front with what she feels about anything and how that prevents Booth from saying what he wants to without hurting them both.

This is a really thought provoking story.

[bite_or_avoid]

Thank you so much, hon.

On the flip side of Brennan though, I don't think Booth is capable of that kind of emotional honesty right now. So something has to give, right? ;)

I'm glad you're enjoying this.

[makd]

Excellent update!

I love the way Booth's feelings about Brennan are so very near the surface that they are roiling to explode --- but can't because he's jumping to unwarranted conclusions.

Brennan,on the other hand, is hurt and mystified because the usually open Booth is "closing the door" to interaction with her.

Great story.

[bite_or_avoid]

Yeah, the miscommunication and emotional reticence between them right now is creating a very difficult situation.

So glad you're enjoying this!

[biba79]

Incredible.

I like how Olivia told him to go see Brennan and how she talked to Brennan too.

Looks like Booth is the one that's jealous now. Although I don't blame him for being mad. While he was in a war, seems like she was actually enjoying her time away.

I can't wait to see what happens next!

Thanks!

[bite_or_avoid]

Thank you so much, sweetie! I'm really glad you're enjoying this. Hopefully I can get over my issues with the show and continue this soon.