I gazed at you for an instant before
Gracefully feasting on your lips
And grieved the absence of daylight
against your dainty eyelids
and ragged cheeks
You looked so helpless in your corner of the bed
about to be ambushed with kisses
and caresses
of the exquisite kind
about to be robbed of momentary ecstasy
Then I kissed you
Without
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I visited your journal, but your profile is not detailed. It's interesting that most of your entries are quotes of other people's work. Does each entry reflect what is going on in your life at the time that you posted it?
I would love to hear a little bit about who you are...
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I'm always been a better interviewee than memoirist.
The entries comprised of others' work do represent the depth of my moment. I feel sad often that there isn't more of a balance of my own words, like I am misappropriating my betters for my own purposes, but sometimes I don't have the energy to say something that properly externalizes the internal.
That all sounds a bit moany; I'm a relatively happy person.
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I just received a comment from you on greatpoets and when I came to look at you site I found this and it is just wonderful. I was teary-eyed myself. It gave me great longings. Anyway, I just wanted to let you know. Thanks
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So you must have assumed the speaker to be male, and then found it hard to imagine a female subject?
If that is really the case, now I wonder what made you assume it was written in a man's voice.
Thanks for letting me know your thoughts; it excites me to find out what how people read what I write.
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It was written about a man in the voice of a woman. the voice of a woman threw me off because of words like "dainty eyelids." It may be an accurate description, but not a common description for a man.
I don't explain myself well, but I usually find poems about women in bed telling great description of body parts, the lovely breasts, etc. Men are not described by their bodies when someone is speaking gently. Only when sex is the main focus are men laid out like a map. It is also interesting that this woman is so agressive with her sleeping lover. I don't know, it just sounded like a man to me. Thanks for straightening me out. (excuse the pun)
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