30_romances Theme 35: Memory; photo [Naruto manga - Haruno Sakura x Uzumaki Naruto]

[bjfactory]

Fandom: Naruto
Title: Memento
Author: bjfactory
Theme(s): 30-romances #35 - Forget-me-not ; memory ; photo
Characters: Haruno Sakura, Uzumaki Naruto, Uchiha Sasuke
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Swearing. Future fic. Literal mess of a WAFFle. I mean, it's 3:30AM and I'm a mess.
Disclaimer: Kishimoto's characters and my words.
Summary: Naruto and Sakura talk on a bridge

Comments

[marlex]

WAFF is good! Just what I needed this morning. I loved their interactions, especially when she put her finger to his lips.

[bjfactory]

Haha! Thanks! That move is pretty overused in any type of an intimate situation but after around 2AM my brain stopped caring about cliche and was just shooting off the things it thought would work...

Granted, by that time, my Naruto probably thought my Sakura was finger lickin' good... who was I to stop them?

Crap. Still not awake enough to be coherent!

Hehe! My favorite part would be the vegetable comment... reminded me of the panel where Kakashi shows up by Naruto's window with a basket of all the good for you stuff while Naruto was eating his ramen and giving his old sensei the "We're not trading" look.

[parapluies]

OMG. This is so beautiful.. and you stayed true to both Naruto & Sakura, even during the confession, because some just ruin it by making them OOC. I absolutely love this! Great job! =)

[bjfactory]

^_^v Thanks very much! I had writing it, so I'm happy you had fun reading it :) Granted, I'm still going to need another day or two of sitting on this before I can see if it's what it should have been. Sleep deprivation just makes me think everything's awesome. Kukuku! But I'm glad you got a kick out of it!

Maybe I don't read enough OOC NaruSaku, so mind if you tell me how they are usually when they confess in other ficdoms? To prevent future landmines from exploding beneath my writer's feet and whatnot.

[parapluies]

well i dont read a lot of OOC narusaku either to tell you the truth (i just backspace if it even starts getting a tad ooc for my taste), but the ones that i did happen to have read have sakura all lovey dovey (like the kind that's just not her style) and she starts calling Naruto "Naruto-KUN" - that annoys me a lot, because "kun" is something you add out of respect, like if you aren't really that close to the person. i'm no expert on japanese terms, but i know at least if the suffixes are dropped then the people are closer and are on much friendlier terms than if "kun" is added to their names. and to have sakura go from calling him naruto to NARUTO-KUN... it just doesn't seem right. in naruto's case, at least when he calls sakura "sakura-chan" - "chan" is a form of affection. well, that's just my opinion... and i thought you did a great job with both sakura & naruto.

lol wow... you still are able to write really well even when you're sleep deprived! ^^ can't wait for my from you that's for sure!

[bjfactory]

Well, Sakura was a bit girly in the beginning, but she was just suppressing her inner tomboy. This makes her cool because I'm tired of reading this tomboy act while the girl surpresses her girliness that needs rescuing. That's just annoyingly cliche and just demeans the character. I never thought I'd write a fic about when Sasuke gets back and Sakura chose Naruto like this, but then, I also didn't want to leave that hanging either. They resolved one problem of a broken team, so now they're going to rehabilitate Sasuke together. It's leaning towards NaruSaku, for sure, but I chose not to have Sakura call it a boyfriend/girlfriend thing because when I wrote it... I just couldn't see her say it

[thrustingmom69]

This was just great and I look forward to reading more for you. Lolz Naruto cannot resist Sakura. ♥

[thrustingmom69]

*from you, dammit.

[bjfactory]

Hehe! I get what you were saying :D And thank you! I don't think Naruto can resist Sakura... especially now that she's a kick-ass medic-nin with unknown Genjutsu potential! (If someone would just freakin' teach it to her!) GIR!