Welcome to the Crew Part 2

[black_feenix]

Fandom: xxxHolic
Pairing: DoumekixWatanuki
Disclaimer: -snorts- As if I'd have time to write a fic if I owned xxxHolic.
Rating: PG
Word Count: 1,474
Summary: On his way to the Americas, desperate for a new start, Watanuki is forced to join the pirate crew of The Wish Granter. How will he cope aboard a ship Captained by a woman who is always drunk, and

Comments

[dazzleyourmind]

You're starting to hit your stride with this story. This chapter read more smoothly. Having read more, I can say that I think you have captured the character's personalities well. Mokona's "Screw crackers! Mokona wants cake!" got a laugh out of me and is so very Mokona-like. And Doumeki's non-reaction to Watanuki's weapon of choice, also very Doumeki. Another part that had me laughing was Watanuki's protesting that he didn't want to be a pirate. The thief with less hygiene line was hilarious and very much something Watanuki would come out with.

[black_feenix]

Thanks!!! This part was more talk and action while the other one was more descriptive.
Yeah, the Mokona 'Screw Crackers!' bit adn the theif with less hygiene was when I was trying to sleep but my mind was buzzing. They made me laugh so much i had to write it down!
-grins- Yay! Thanks for your comment!

[banshee_tao]

As much I adore short fics and drabbles - stories with an actual plot RULE!
I love the dialogs - the characters are very IC and the pirate crew seems to be an entertaining one!
Hope that the next chapter won't take too long to write!:)

[black_feenix]

Eeeeeh! Thank you!!! I had fun coming up with the pirate crew! XD
-sighs- Oh god. I'm watching some Star Trek and trying to come up with some ideas for the next chapter. I have the start!.....now for the rest.