Exodus Theory

Nov 01, 2005 21:55

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Writer's comments black_light88 November 2 2005, 03:22:38 UTC
This one is the must have suicide song in any series done by me. Again, the name makes perfect sense in the context of the song. Not my best on the subject but once again I was happy with the structure and such.

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random_laughter November 2 2005, 04:43:47 UTC
Simply because of the subject matter I'm inclined not to like it... I've read too many suicide pieces and seen too many repeated motifs. (Such as bloody wrists, or justifying goodbye.)

However. Some parts of this I would like to point out cause I think they're really poignant:

These papers
Form a montage
Of a life left
Out in the rain
The rain...

which is very metaporical and kicks ass because of about three different mental images colliding at once, and

No matter what they tell you
It's giving up which
Brings the greatest pain

So true.

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