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[black_rainbow87]

So i wrote anoter poem. This one is different, its shorter but i think it is way better, it has more describing words. lol Its pretty much about the same thing as my last peom but this one is just wrote from a different angle kinda.. haha

ya tell me what you think!

Feel the light september breeze
The warmth of the soft sun
The fraganace of the

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[captain_stubs]

i thnk its good....but grey isnt really a vibrant colour!!lol
but i think u need to look past whats there...if u know what i mean cause i really dont! lol

also...perfection is unattainable...so the line "i see your perfection" is kinda and oxymoron...but thats just what i think...

[black_rainbow87]

thanks vicki
when it comes to grey, it can be a vibrant colour, vibrant just means that it stands out really.

i don think i know what you mean by look past whats there. lol i havn't got a clue :D

I know perfection is unattainable thats why i used that word...I wanted the line "i see your perfection" to be an oxymoron

You really have to know what i am talking about to really understand this poem. I was thinking back to when i was sitting in the big maple tree in my grand parents back garden. I am talking about the contrast between my grandparents garden and the garden across the fence.

thanks for telling me what you thought of my poem.
:)

Miss ya

[astralscorp_13]

Miss ya hugssssssssssssssss why dont ya chat to me anymore luv ya girl