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blacksymphony

Drabble session 9/8/11

Sep 08, 2011 19:27

DRABBLES AGAIN! Starring:

Fate: aka, "Yes, I DID enjoy my reward, thanks."
Darkblur: aka, "I promise, this time I won't forget my own anatomy."
Milly:, aka, "I'm just here for the challenge rounds!"
Raptor:, aka, "That's VELOCIRAPTOR to you ( Read more... )

Comments 27

Round One blacksymphony September 9 2011, 00:49:18 UTC

Wesker/Viola - orphanViola wasn’t quite sure at what point during her “business arrangement” with Albert Wesker that she came to understand that the man had no existing family. She had been associated with people who, very obviously, came from a family of six siblings - they veritably radiated an aura of affinity for all those around them ( ... )

Re: Round One fergie20 September 9 2011, 00:53:06 UTC

Ooooooo it is a good line! :)
It is a very good introspective piece.

Re: Round One blacksymphony September 9 2011, 00:54:51 UTC

Thanks! For some reason my Wesker senses are tingling... lol

Re: Round One nerdyprogrammer September 9 2011, 01:02:55 UTC

Wesker, the man with no past. Or at least, none he wants to share. Pretty good, explains that Wesker's a complicated person yet doesn't tell much about him. Good work!

Shadow/Dusk - limbo (500 words) nerdyprogrammer September 9 2011, 00:56:57 UTC

Dusk plops herself down onto the couch of the apartment she and Amy share. The pink hedgehog is off with her Sonic, the room is just warm enough to encourage laziness but not so warm as to be uncomfortable, and her MP3 player has a full charge.

“Hooray for having nothing to do!” she cheers, popping the earbuds in and turning the device on. She cranks the music up, leans back, and starts tapping her foot and bobbing her head in time with the first song.

Slowly she starts to lip-sync with the song as well, the whole four minutes until it stops. Then the device selects a somewhat calmer song, then another, and another...the peaceful music eventually lulling the purple hedgehog to sleep.

With a yawn she curls up, the buds tumbling from her ears. For the longest time she enjoys her nap in the comfortable warmth of the apartment...until she starts squirming in her sleep.

Within her dream, Dusk is in a familiar and unwelcome landscape...although that term might not be accurate seeing as there isn't any ground in sight. Whatever she's ( ... )

Re: Shadow/Dusk - limbo (500 words) fergie20 September 9 2011, 01:00:39 UTC

Hmmm. Introspective as well and Dusk's dreams are not nice.
good job!

Re: Shadow/Dusk - limbo (500 words) blacksymphony September 9 2011, 01:01:02 UTC

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Of Mice and Meat (500) trevorraptor82 September 9 2011, 00:57:20 UTC

Of Mice and Meat ( ... )

Re: Of Mice and Meat (500) fergie20 September 9 2011, 01:02:46 UTC

Craziness is going on, but I enjoyed it!
Good job!

Re: Of Mice and Meat (500) blacksymphony September 9 2011, 01:06:52 UTC

Good first drabble! I figure if you can work your prompt word into the drabble, you're doing a good job so far :)

I feel like I need to watch Jurassic Park now lol

Re: Of Mice and Meat (500) nerdyprogrammer September 9 2011, 01:08:23 UTC

Hmm...well, hard to judge since I'm not sure what series this is...but good work anyway!

Sonic/Amy- fortitude (500 words) nerdyprogrammer September 9 2011, 01:52:02 UTC

“Isn't that view beautiful Amy?” Sonic asks ( ... )

Re: Sonic/Amy- fortitude (500 words) blacksymphony September 9 2011, 01:56:39 UTC

It's not that it's disjointed... it's more like you weren't sure what to do, but didn't know when to end it. Drawn out. That's the word.

But like Milly said, you run into this problem sometimes. We can't all connect with every word we're prompted for. Remember, this is "writing practice".

Cute, overall.

Re: Sonic/Amy- fortitude (500 words) fergie20 September 9 2011, 02:00:08 UTC

It's cute! I like it!

Re: Sonic/Amy- fortitude (500 words) trevorraptor82 September 9 2011, 04:12:05 UTC

I really like the description! There's so much that goes through a guys head when he's thinking about the girl beside him that's sleeping, fantastic job :)

the ending line seems a little out of place, when it goes from 'it's such an adorable sight. . . in the morning' maybe it's just me

I thoroughly enjoyed it :D

Round Two blacksymphony September 9 2011, 01:52:54 UTC

Auron/Lancaster - feverAuron awoke for seemingly no reason at all, his breathing heavy and his heart hammering against his ribcage. Though the night was reasonably cool - it usually was in the foothills of Mount Gagazet - Auron could feel his body lathered with a sheen of sweat ( ... )

Re: Round Two nerdyprogrammer September 9 2011, 01:57:16 UTC

Seems fine to me. Sweet of Auron to use his jacket as an extra blanket for Lancaster. Cute little drabble, good job.

Re: Round Two fergie20 September 9 2011, 02:06:13 UTC

Another facet of this relationship and its very sweet!
I like it! :)