As Red Eyes Stare Through The Night [8][YunJae]

[bling_chullie]

Title: As Red Eyes Stare Through The Night
Pairing/Characters: YunJae, Yoochun, Changmin, Junsu
Rating: R
Warning: Character deaths (just minors..; do I need to warn for already dead characters?), Violence
Disclaimer: Nothing belongs to me except of the story idea.
Summary: Jaejoong was torn out of his own quiet world when he saw someone else take

Comments

[kattan69]

Thanks for answering most of it but still wonder why Min would go all the trouble in securing a room when he can just drive Jae to the police while he was sleeping in the car. And where is Chun? There is still a few missing gaps in the story and it is kind of short in the ending. Anyways, thanks for completing it.

[bling_chullie]

thank you first of all for reading all the way through lovely

[kattan69]

Maybe instead of Jae escaping from the prison.....why don't you put that he escaped before the police can lock him up.....like while the police was transporting him to the station, he somehow managed to escape from the police custody.

And this time he is planning revenge by taking down those people who betrayed him...like Min and Yunho. Since Chun is still out there, you can make it that Jae found him to get information..his part in this story was missing...we still don't know his connection with Yunho. And later you would show Jae enjoy killing Min and a final showdown between Yunho and him...with both dying together.

Now that would end the story perfectly. What do you think?

[bling_chullie]

haha not bad :D it actually gave me some good ideas. i just hope i can write them down well enough ^^ thank you so much, i hope i can make this good enough for you!! for any other suggestions or just anything, tell me :D thanks so much for helping ^^