heritage
seeing as i don't really have that much of a heritage. that is, one must look back many a generation before finding some form of culture, because let's face it, australia, as a country isn't brimming with culture. and even when one gets there i'm irish which i've never felt a strong connection to and over those generations it's been diluted greatly
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i also enjoyed your inclusion of the dropkick murphy's. very well done.
maybe from now on ill remember your irish and not scotish...
ps: tar cascading from ears? haha couldnt think of anything to rhyme with years ay? HAHA nah seriously good job :]
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the lungs of a man,
who is thrice my years,
tar, so full and thick,
It really does create an image and implies a relationship already which is fantastic for the nonspecific style you're using. Obviously you are trying to make it rhyme and it's not something that comes easy to any of us. I suggest if you are stuck for inspiration however, try something like: http://rhyme.poetry.com/
It's a great site and extremely suited for helping people pen their tradionally styled poetry.
I think you are already on your way though, these lines have to be my favourite for sure:
a love of the punt,
and a love of the drink.
two habits, nan says,
would cause me to sink.
It really does paint you as an Australian through the diction you use and the way you've used it (syntax). It's great to see the pride come through in such a multicultural country (not to mention the university itself ( ... )
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