Because you live. But very few, love
Title: Because you live. But very few, love
Pairing: Myungsoo/Sungyeol
Rating: PG-13
Length: One-shot, 5,001
A/N: Beta-ed by the amazing kiccy and my birthday present for aurelynn
( Sungyeol is a dreamer and every day his head is full with ever-changing shapes and people and impressions. )
Pairing: Myungsoo/Sungyeol
Rating: PG-13
Length: One-shot, 5,001
A/N: Beta-ed by the amazing kiccy and my birthday present for aurelynn
( Sungyeol is a dreamer and every day his head is full with ever-changing shapes and people and impressions. )
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AHGGSSHDKJSGHDGAKLHJHSHGDHJGFH SCREAMINNNNNNNNNG
I PROMISE I WILL BE BACK TO READ THIS ;A;
/SQUISHES YOU FOREVER
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though this is about a week late
First of all I really, really wish all the best to you unnie- never stop being so amazing at everything you do, never underestimate yourself and forever remain the great, friendly, cheerful, charming person you are ( ... )
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you're the princess of angst and imagery. ; w ;
♥
poor sungyeol. ; m ;
and myungsoo.
SOO WAE DIE?!
i spy hojong. /squeee!
i'd give you a prettier comment, but i'm horrible with words. ; m ;
post quoting won't work either 'cause i'm a mess of tears, glitter, and spazzing right now. (and it'd look like this)
i love you ♥ c:
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Haha that's the first time anybody has crowned me the princess of anything xD
I love you too ♥
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SO EXCITE I'LL BE BACK TO READ THIS IN LIKE A FEW HOURS /SOB
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/CRYING FOREVER
WAE YOU DIS AMAZING PURSON?
I. I. I can't even. With the imagery and lingering mystery and quiet sting of bitterness and soft melancholy and I /sob what is this constricting thing called language that is unable to express my thoughts properly? ლ(ಥへಥლ)
COPY-PASTE SPAZZ TIME IS NOW
He laughs with his eyes closed and soul open
Omg this line. This line. It's so beautiful it tears at my heart and just ugh what a wonderful way to describe Yeollie I can't /sobs
People live and walk and never look around- they never notice Sungyeol with his cold coffee and warm hands and voice that hums the softest of melodies- the one that tells about love and happiness and just how fleeting those emotions really are.
This is so true and beautiful and gah you are perfect.
He’s a mystery- a mystery with eyes of cinnamon flavored chocolate and hair of crow black feathers.
Why are you so good at poetic descriptions? WHY.
Their rules and principles crash and burn and eliminate each-other. It has always been the opposites that ( ... )
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Dear you are probably my most favorite commenter seriously- I love your flailing and the quoting and the gifs and just... (though you really abuse crying Woohyun xD)
You are the second person with the cupids- seriously people I love you and all of you read in between the lines so accurately (which probably only means i'm quite obvious) but I had never ever though of cupids until i read your comments- I myself don't even know what Myungsoo and Sungyeol are in this fic~ I'm seriously considering a contiation of some sort that will focus mainly on unraveling this new fantasy species that I have created haha~
I just want to say a very, very big thank you to you ♥
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in any case, i'd say that it worked wholly for this particular story. not every writer is able to enclose things of before (civilization perhaps) but your style managed to do so. at first i was wondering whether they were immortals, somewhere along the line of being cupids but then myungsoo died so that couldn't really have been it. Were you threading on reincarnation, perhaps? Or maybe I'm looking at it wrongly idrk.
i really liked sungyeol's portrayal here more over myungsoo's but i had immensely enjoyed the dreamy feel. definitely. and i'm sure chelsea would like this very much ♥
i don't mean to sound like a prick but you spelled length wrong.
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from the moment i started writing i have been waiting for a comment like yours- and i don't care how cheesy or cliched or stupid that sounds. just... i know i'm not really that good at writing and i was in desperate, desperate need of some criticism that would at least show me what can I improve, what i'm doing wrong- i don't even know if i'll be able to do anything about my style at all but i just hope that time and practice will help me live up to your expectations if even a little bit more. so thank you ♥
i'm also feeling very, very happy that this as a whole worked for you and yes i was threading of reincarnation. i just want to say "thank you" over a million times to you ~ i'm glad you liked my characterization because as you may have noticed i mainly use descriptions and that's the biggest flaw of my fics probably- i always think that a person will naturally get bored from all of them and that the feelings and the characterizations just won't fall across to the reader the way they's supposed to.
fixed it ( ... )
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you're most welcome. there's nothing wrong with descriptions. you're a storyteller. you're to tell a story, not lament on what's happening. just go with your gut feeling, find a balance between your characters and the story itself and i'm sure you'll be on the right track.
i hope i don't come across as obnoxious or acting as though i'm superior - like i said, this is just how i'm perceiving your writing is all.
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1/3rd of forever
favorites this line forever ;n;
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