Lessons Learned - Chapter Two

[bloodyxunicorns]

This is being removed for now. I apologize if it's an inconvenience for anyone, but I just feel like it needs some good edits for it to be, well, not embarrassing (for me). I reread through it recently and was a bit horrified by the many grammar problems it has. So for now it's down until I can either edit it and pick it back up, or, well, for good

Comments

[dearkiki]

Wow! Another great chapter! :-)

I am glad you introduced us the other slaves there. It will be interesting to read more about them, especially Eva. :-)

And as was said above, I also loved that scene, where they all snuggled at their Master's feet. It's a rather cute image. :D <3

Can't wait to read more!

[bloodyxunicorns]

hehe, thanks :)

Yep, it seems a few are really interested in Eva's character ^^; glad to hear you're one of them as well.

Really? Well that's good, because there will be more like that ;) And I agree, a cute image - one of the main reasons why I had to put it in!

Thanks for commenting! And love your icon, those guys look hot ^^

[thetowerxvi]

I agree with Charisstoma in my curiosity about Eva but at the same time Im a little wary of Collin. It seems he is closest to the master at this point and as such would have the most influence. He seems to be a good guy so far but there are those little hints that make me wonder if he could be being so nice to Porter in a kind of "keep your friends close, but your enemies closer" kind of way...he just has yet to really give much away about himself since he seems to base his reactions off of the others.

Or I could just be reading way too much into everything like I always do. Loving the story. =) Keep up the good work!

[bloodyxunicorns]

Well, I can promise answers soon on Eva - and glad to hear you're interest is also peaked on her. Interesting observation/guess on Collin's character/intentions. I can't tell you if that's the case or not, but I will say that all the characters are flawed - and I've shown Collin to be nearly perfect so far. That's all I'm saying though...

And if I just spoiled you or anyone else, I'm sorry! I can't keep anything in - and I don't think that bit of information is really important, eh?

Anyway, happy that you love the story, and thanks for commenting!

[methosdeb]

loved it ,I think porter might have a problem with nelson ,collin seems nice though as least there is someone he can talk to .

[bloodyxunicorns]

Happy to hear you loved it :) And, you're right, Porter does have a problem with Nelson - it's more of the fact that the other slave has pegged him on the bad-list despite having any warrant or reason.

thanks for commenting! ^^

[nola_nola]

I'm enjoying this very much. Please give us more.

[bloodyxunicorns]

hehe, thanks! :) And love your icon; I LOVE Gale!! He's hot ^^

[dramagirl007]

This is interesting so far... can't wait until it progresses, I hope the punishments aren't too bad and he can find a friend in Collin. Nelson... well he's another story. Keep up the good work. :)

[bloodyxunicorns]

Thanks! I can't tell you how the punishments are gonna be, unfortunately. Or whether or not Collin and him end up as friends, and Nelson... I agree, another story, lol.

Thanks for commenting!