Chapter V

[blue_mystiq]

Dramatis Personae

Rahne (Gina Gershon): The Jedi Exile. Nisse female.
Kreia (Kate Mulgrew): Her mysterious benefactor. Human female.
Atton Rand (John Barrowman): A rogue of uncertain loyalty. Human male.
T3-M4: A faithful helper. Utility droid.

Comments

[jade_shiseido]

I'm really enjoying how you're fleshing out the story and characters - the Rem scenario you created is far superior to the game's contrived version - your offering gives us a believable thug, stitches up plot gaps and heightens the intrigue. Oh, and the inclusion of feminine nudity is always muchly appreciated ;)

[blue_mystiq]

Yeah, the in-game Rem thing we got was fantastically stupid. Having no idea why the Gen would have been interested in the Exile, reworking it as an Atton plot made so much more sense. Though not mentioned, it also plays with the idea that if Revan missed that particular plot hook on Manaan, then it was available for someone else...

There should be a great deal more nudity and sex come chapter seven

[vureoelt]

Hmmm. While Kreia certainly is old enough to pass as the Exile's mother, why bother with the ruse?

Interesting change to Batu Rem. I do remember it had some lame qualities to it, so I'd agree with the above poster.

And a nice cliffhanger at the end. Can't wait to see what's next. :)

[blue_mystiq]

Because they're attempting to be in cognito and Jedi don't have family

[vureoelt]

Oh, right! Silly me. I forgot that last.

[welearntosay]

I've silently been reading this for a while now and I wanted to say that I'm really enjoying the way that you're expanding on the storyline - I hate to sound like a parrot, but, yes, the Rem part was much much better than what happened in the game. And I enjoy your Exile, as well.

I'm really looking forward to the next chapter! :D

[blue_mystiq]

Thanks :)

Next chapter is taking a while to write - it's basically Kreia seducing Rahne to her view of the Force. And working out exactly what that is, as well as what exactly Rahne would have been taught the first time around, isn't easy.

[tjalorak]

>>"According to him, finding Atton wasn't his mission here," Rahne muses. "Which means these Genoharadan are planning a hit against someone or something on Telos that they consider disruptive. But blowing his cover the way he has means the target obviously isn't of immediate importance nor going anywhere in a hurry."

Ooo. This is interesting. In the Restored Content Mod of the game, there are some chances to work for the Genohardin although to the last, all of them give dark side points, I believe. That being said, they did uniformly say they wanted to preserve the Republic. I wonder if this means they were going after the Exchange?