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[bluebarrypie]

Here's a poem I just randomly made up tell me what you think or what it needs, I think it needs a line about touch to tie in the whole senses thing but I don't know how so....
I called for help but you werent listening
I begged for mercy but you couldn't see me
I wanted my life
but you wanted it more

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[luckynfg]

I liked it a lot!!

I read your stuff in the Edda thing too, very good job! :D

[bluebarrypie]

thanks!! i'll write a poem for you later k?

[luckynfg]

YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[highandlo]

Hem Hem!