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WIP - Untitled Cut & Run FanFic - 2nd Draft

Jun 30, 2013 19:43

Untitled WIP
Author: bluesylver
Fandom: Cut & Run by Abigail Roux
Characters: Zane & Becky Garrett
Warnings: Swearing, m/f sex, long ass sentences, past perfect tense

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Comments 7

youbloodysnake July 1 2013, 01:21:35 UTC

-> As he unbuckled his belt, Becky began to hum ---stripper music ( ... )

bluesylver July 1 2013, 02:08:14 UTC

Thanks for the speedy reply. I know I have some awkward continuity where I added backstory, and I didn't want to work on it if I was going to have to yank the backstory out ( ... )

youbloodysnake July 1 2013, 02:32:11 UTC

I think they would both call each other Sweetheart. I remember he had said either in T&G or TIR that he called her sweetheart, but it does make sense that they would use the same pet name ( ... )

bluesylver July 1 2013, 13:19:33 UTC

Reading through again it looks like I managed to get the dialog incorporated correctly some of the time. I was rereading some of the series for reference and noticed Abi using some of the same attributions as I did, so I don't feel so bad. Minions love the books, so they probably won't be too bothered with it in my story. I'll probably still try to correct it at some point ( ... )

hart_d July 1 2013, 02:15:15 UTC

Wow, I really enjoyed this a lot and look forward to reading more. I liked your explanation of how Zane became the man that he is, and I felt it accurately captured the experience of growing up with emotional abuse. I also really appreciated using Becky's point of view. She really did love him, the best way she could, even though he had that wall between himself and the rest of the world. It's a beautiful piece.

bluesylver July 1 2013, 14:21:07 UTC

Thanks for the wonderful comment. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and that it seems realistic. I'm also relieved so far everyone seems ok with my portrayal of Becky and her relationship with Zane. This is only my second fanfiction ever and my first attempt at writing in almost ten years, so the encouragement I've been getting has been fantastically reassuring ( ... )

hart_d July 1 2013, 17:38:07 UTC

My Tumblr is at http://frellingaround.tumblr.com/.

Yeah, everything feels so accurate in this piece. In my opinion, you really got inside these characters' heads, and that was a good explanation for why Harrison might have acted the way that he did. I think that's what's so great about fanfic - you can imagine different characters' motivations and explore them.

It's hard to believe this is only your second time trying your hand at fanfic! That's very impressive.